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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. v.14

: Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. v. 14
School days are the foundation stones in a child's social development. It is true that children who are unruly in class tend to have a detrimental effect on the whole batch of students: all the students get disturbed, and therefore, affected by their behaviour. Hence, it has often been suggested that such inattentive and ill-mannered students should be segregated from the rest of the class and tutored separately. However, I am firmly opposed to the idea because I believe that such separation among students will not solve the problem; it will actually increase the divide between well mannered and disruptive students, which is definitely not a good proposition. Although, it is true that all students do not have the same mental alertness and well-behaved demeanour, this division on the basis of behaviour can have several repercussions. Firstly, it may have a negative impact on the minds of the ill-mannered child and may psychologically scare a child. Pin-pointing a child as ill-behaved without finding out the reason for this behaviour is extremely unfair. The school authorities need to dwell a little deeper into the problem to find out the cause for such a negative behaviour. For instance, a recent survey conducted in the UK in 2016 clearly demonstrated the importance of the family atmosphere in the early years of the child's development. Children from broken or dysfunctional families often project abnormal traits during their formative years. Thus, rather than being reprimanded, such students need to be tackled with love and empathy. Moreover, this segregation may make the ill-mannered student believe that every time he can get away from the mainstream and continue with his wrongdoings. This, in turn, will send a very wrong message to all students. For instance, a rude and destructive child may gradually alienate himself from his immediate family and friends; all the while continuing with his behaviour. Last but not the least, we are robbing the ill-behaved student of the chance to get transformed by removing him from the company of good students. Having said this, it is also true that since the number of hours spent on teaching students in school is fixed, such interruptive behaviour by some students takes away precious study hours from the obedient ones who are not at fault. However, instead of creating a utopic world of good and bad, school authorities and parents need to tackle this behaviour by the various method like positive reinforcements, negative reinforcements, counseling by psychologists, etc. All these methods and a little care and concern will help a disobedient student become an obedient and a well-mannered one because nothing in this world is permanent and absolute. To reiterate, I am of the opinion that instead of creating a divide among students, one should aim at tackling the problem so that there can be a change in the student's behaviour for the better.
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School
days are the foundation stones in a child's social development. It is true that children who are
unruly
in
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class
tend to have a detrimental effect
on the whole
batch of
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students
: all the
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students
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get
disturbed, and
therefore
,
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affected
by their
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behaviour
.
Hence
, it has
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often
been suggested
that such inattentive and ill-mannered
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students
should
be segregated
from the rest of the
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class
and tutored
separately
.
However
, I am
firmly
opposed to the
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idea
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because
I believe that such separation among
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students
will not solve the problem; it will actually increase the divide between
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well mannered
and disruptive
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students
, which is definitely not a
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good
proposition.

Although, it is true that all
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students
do not have the same mental alertness and well-behaved
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demeanour
, this division on the basis of
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behaviour
can have several repercussions.
Firstly
, it may have a
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negative
impact on the minds of the ill-mannered
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child
and may
psychologically
scare a
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child
. Pin-pointing a
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child
as ill-behaved without finding out the reason for this
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behaviour
is
extremely
unfair. The
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school
authorities need to dwell a
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little
deeper into the problem to find out the cause for such a
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negative
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behaviour
.
For instance
, a recent survey conducted in the UK in 2016
clearly
demonstrated the importance of the family atmosphere in the early years of the child's development. Children from broken or dysfunctional families
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
project abnormal traits during their formative years.
Thus
,
rather
than
being reprimanded
, such
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students
need to
be tackled
with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
and empathy.

Moreover
, this segregation may
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make
the ill-mannered
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student
believe that every time he can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
away from the mainstream and continue with his wrongdoings. This, in turn, will
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send
a
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very
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wrong
message to all
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students
.
For instance
, a rude and destructive
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child
may
gradually
alienate himself from his immediate family and friends; all the while continuing with his
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behaviour
. Last
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but
not the least, we are robbing the ill-behaved
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student
of the chance to
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get
transformed by removing him from the
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company
of
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good
students.

Having said this, it is
also
true that since the number of hours spent on teaching
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students
in
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school
is
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fixed
, such
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interruptive
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behaviour
by
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some
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students
takes away precious study hours from the obedient ones who are not at fault.
However
,
instead
of creating a
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utopic
world of
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good
and
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bad
,
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school
authorities and parents need to tackle this
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behaviour
by the various method like
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
reinforcements,
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negative
reinforcements, counseling by psychologists, etc. All these methods and a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
care and concern will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
a disobedient
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student
become an obedient and a well-mannered one
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because
nothing in this world is permanent and absolute.

To reiterate, I am of the opinion that
instead
of creating a divide among
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students
, one should aim at tackling the problem
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so
that there can be a
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change
in the student's
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behaviour
for the better.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS essay : Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. v. 14

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
476 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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