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Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience. v.2

Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. with this view? v. 2
There is no doubt that some students in schools behave badly and their behaviour causes difficulty for others either because it has a negative effect on the group or because ordinary students find it difficult to study with them. One solution is to take these students away and teach them on their own. However, if we simply have them removed after one or two warnings, we are limiting their educational opportunities because it seems to me that a school which caters for difficult students is a sort of “prison” whatever name you give it and the people who go there may never recover from the experience. This can then cause problems for the wider society. Perhaps we need to look at why the disruptive students behave badly before we separate them. Disruptive students may be very intelligent and find the classes boring because the work is too easy. Perhaps these students need extra lessons rather than separate lessons. Or perhaps the teachers are uninspiring and this results in behavioural problems so we need better teachers. On the other hand, most students put up with this situation rather than cause trouble, and some people argue that we have to learn to suffer bad teachers and boring situations and that students who can’t learn this lesson need to be taught separately. So before we condemn the students to a special school, we should look at factors such as the teaching, because once the children have been separated, it is very unlikely that they will be brought back.
There is no doubt that
some
students
in schools behave
badly
and their
behaviour
causes difficulty for others either
because
it has a
negative
effect on the group or
because
ordinary
students
find it difficult to study with them.

One solution is to take these
students
away and teach them on their
own
.
However
, if we
simply
have them removed after one or two warnings, we are limiting their educational opportunities
because
it seems to me that a school which caters for difficult
students
is a sort of “prison” whatever name you give it and the
people
who go there may never recover from the experience. This can then cause problems for the wider society.

Perhaps we
need
to look at why the disruptive
students
behave
badly
before
we separate them. Disruptive
students
may be
very
intelligent and find the classes boring
because
the work is too easy. Perhaps these
students
need
extra lessons
rather
than separate lessons. Or perhaps the teachers are uninspiring and this results in
behavioural
problems
so
we
need
better teachers.
On the other hand
, most
students
put up with this situation
rather
than cause trouble, and
some
people
argue that we
have to
learn to suffer
bad
teachers and boring situations and that
students
who can’t learn this lesson
need
to
be taught
separately
.

So
before
we condemn the
students
to a special school, we should look at factors such as the teaching,
because
once the children have
been separated
, it is
very
unlikely that they will
be brought
back.
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14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. with this view? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6.5
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