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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades. Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive. What are your opinions on this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words v.13

: The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades. Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive. What are your opinions on this? 13
The Internet has brought significant changes to our lives in recent years. Yet, there remains some disagreement as to whether the overall effect of this technology has been positive or negative. While there are certainly valid arguments to the contrary, I personally believe that the benefits of the Internet far outweigh its drawbacks. These benefits are twofold. First of all, it is an indisputable fact that the Internet has revolutionized the way we communicate. Despite the risk of social isolation – a problem occasionally seen in people who spend too much time at their computer terminal rather than relating to people in the real world – most of us have benefited greatly from e-mail and internet chat programs like MSN Messenger. These incredibly useful and powerful tools of communication facilitate both contact with loved ones in faraway places and global trade. Equally importantly, though, the Internet has placed the entire word (and all of the information in it) at our fingertips. In earlier times, conducting research entailed long hours searching library shelves. Now, however, the same information can be accessed at the click of a button. Admittedly, not all of theinformation available on the Internet is reliable or helpful – there is a vast amount of material online that some would consider offensive or dangerous, ranging from pornography to instructions on how to make bombs. Nonetheless, I would contend that this free flow of information has generally been a very positive development. By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that the Internet has had a positive impact on modern life because of its influence on communication and the flow of information.
The Internet has brought significant
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to our
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lives
in recent years.
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, there remains
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some
disagreement
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as to whether
the
overall
effect of this technology has been
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positive
or
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negative
. While there are
certainly
valid arguments to the contrary, I
personally
believe that the benefits of the Internet far outweigh its drawbacks. These benefits are twofold.

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First of all
, it is an indisputable fact that the Internet has revolutionized the way we communicate. Despite the
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risk
of social isolation
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–
a problem
occasionally
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seen
in
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people
who spend too much time at their computer terminal
rather
than relating to
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people
in the real world
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–
most of us have benefited
greatly
from e-mail and internet chat programs like MSN Messenger. These
incredibly
useful and powerful tools of communication facilitate both contact with
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loved
ones in faraway places and global trade.

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Equally
importantly
, though, the Internet has placed the entire word (and
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all of the
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information
in

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it
) at our fingertips. In earlier times, conducting research entailed long hours searching library shelves.
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Now
,
however
, the same
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information
can
be accessed
at the click of a button.
Admittedly
, not all of
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theinformation
available on the Internet is reliable or helpful
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–
there is a vast amount of material online that
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some
would consider offensive or
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dangerous
, ranging from pornography to instructions on how to
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make
bombs. Nonetheless, I would contend that this free flow of
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information
has
generally
been a
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very
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positive
development.

By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that the Internet has had a
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positive
impact on modern life
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because
of its influence on communication and the flow of
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information
.
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4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay : The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades. Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive. What are your opinions on this? 13

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
274 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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