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Advantages and disadvantages of cultural tourism v.1

Advantages and disadvantages of cultural tourism v. 1
Nowadays, cultural tourism is welcomed and encouraged in most countries, where it is seen both as an opportunity to display national treasures and achievements to visitors, and also as a source of income and jobs. However, in spite of these benefits, it can also pose severe problems for the specific sites which are visited. There are various advantages of cultural tourism for the sites themselves. IN particular, they may benefit from greatly increased income, part of which may be spent, for example, on improving museums and galleries and on more frequent and more ambitious exhibitions. Even though these may be designed primarily to attract tourists, they are also available for local people to enjoy. A further advantage is that local authorities recognise the value of their sites, which they then invest money in. As a result, monuments and historic buildings are restored and protected. Finally, visitors learn first hand about the ocuntry, whose culture and the customs are consequently understood and appreciated better by both tourists and local people. On the other hand, cultural tourism has a number of drawbacks. The main one is that, in spite of protective measures being taken, the sheer number of visitors can cause serious damage to monuments such as ancient temples or cave paintings. This may mean that an important part of country's national heritage is lost. Furthermore, in a region which the monuments are expected to generate income for the local economy, the site may be spoilt by being surrounded by ugly hotels and other tourist facilities. Finally, if too many tourists visit a site, it may loose its cultural significance within the local community. This is particularly the case for monuments which religious or social importance makes them a central part of community life. On the whole, while cultural tourism is generally beneficial, the problems which it causes can only be avoided with proper planning and sufficient investment in the protection and preservation of the sites which tourists visit. In addition, although cultural tourism in general should not be discouraged, the number of tourists visiting certain sites should be restricted and tourists should be educated to respect them.
Nowadays,
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cultural
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tourism
is welcomed
and encouraged in most countries, where it is
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seen
both as an opportunity to display national treasures and achievements to visitors, and
also
as a source of income and jobs.
However
,
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in spite of
these benefits, it can
also
pose severe problems for the specific
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sites
which
are visited
.

There are various advantages of
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cultural
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tourism
for the
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sites
themselves.
IN particular
, they may benefit from
greatly
increased income, part of which may
be spent
,
for example
, on improving museums and galleries and on more frequent and more ambitious exhibitions.

Even though
these may
be designed
primarily
to attract
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tourists
, they are
also
available for
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local
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people
to enjoy. A
further
advantage is that
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local
authorities
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recognise
the value of their
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sites
, which they then invest money in.
As a result
,
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monuments
and historic buildings
are restored
and protected.
Finally
, visitors learn
first
hand about the
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ocuntry
, whose culture and the customs are
consequently
understood and appreciated better by both
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tourists
and
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local
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people
.

On the other hand
,
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cultural
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tourism
has a number of drawbacks. The main one is that,
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in spite of
protective measures
being taken
, the sheer number of visitors can cause serious damage to
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monuments
such as ancient temples or cave paintings. This may mean that an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
part of country's national heritage
is lost
.
Furthermore
, in a region which the
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monuments
are
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expected
to generate income for the
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local
economy, the
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site
may be
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spoilt
by
being surrounded
by ugly hotels and other
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tourist
facilities.
Finally
, if too
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many
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tourists
visit a
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site
, it may
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loose
its
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cultural
significance within the
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local
community. This is
particularly
the case for
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monuments
which religious or social importance
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makes
them a central part of community life.

On the whole
, while
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cultural
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tourism
is
generally
beneficial, the problems which it causes can
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only
be avoided
with proper planning and sufficient investment in the protection and preservation of the
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sites
which
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tourists
visit.
In addition
, although
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cultural
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tourism
in general
should not
be discouraged
, the number of
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tourists
visiting certain
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sites
should
be restricted
and
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tourists
should
be educated
to respect them.
20Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Advantages and disadvantages of cultural tourism v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
356 words
6
Overall Band Score
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