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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You want to start your own small business. Write a letter to a bank requesting information about obtaining a business loan to finance your new company. In your letter, include the following information: what ki v.8

You want to start your own small business. Write a letter to a bank requesting information about obtaining a business loan to finance your new company. In your letter, include the following information: what ki v. 8
This essay is about the person's life, and how it depends on their own personality. In this essay we will discuss about various factors like how they related and to what extent we agree or disagree. Nowadays it's very common in many people blaming their luck, to hide and cover their personality. Firstly, in the era of 21 century life is very challenging, and there are great challenges in everyday lives. For example, to live better lives for all necessary amenities individuals should word hard, either they are studying or in professional life in barely needed to achieve their goals, which is totally in our hands to fulfil our dreams. Especially when we are in competition with many around us. Furthermore, not limited to personality only' the right direction and correct career path are also an important factor to proceed further, to make sure that we are on the right side. Although, being successful doesn't mean we are very intelligent or expert in our domain, there are several elements associated with our personalities and successful life. In further explanation, I would like to quote an example, some people are born into successful families, and they could have everything what common people desire to have. So, it's very controversial and significant to understand, our life is not only dependent on personality. In conclusion, the personality of a person provides an accurate description of their character. In my understanding, the personality is the only reason, which can be presented as an excuse on life. Each person in the world, have distinguished personality and unique capabilities to live.
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, and how it depends on their
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personality
. In this essay we will
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agree
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21 century
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life
is
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challenging, and there are great challenges in everyday
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.
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live
better
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lives
for all necessary amenities individuals should word
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hard
, either they are studying or in professional
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life
in
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needed to achieve their goals, which is
totally
in our hands to fulfil our dreams.
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around us.
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personality
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further
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into successful families, and they could have everything what common
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desire to have.
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controversial and significant to understand, our
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dependent on personality.

In conclusion
, the
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personality
of a person provides an accurate description of their character. In my understanding, the
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personality
is the
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only
reason, which can
be presented
as an excuse on
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life
. Each person in the world, have distinguished
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personality
and unique capabilities to
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.
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IELTS essay You want to start your own small business. Write a letter to a bank requesting information about obtaining a business loan to finance your new company. In your letter, include the following information: what ki v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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