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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You had a good meal at a local restaurant with your family. Write a letter to the newspaper to tell them about it, describe the meal you had, and why you think the restaurant is worth visiting. Write at least v.16

You had a good meal at a local restaurant with your family. Write a letter to the newspaper to tell them about it, describe the meal you had, and why you think the restaurant is worth visiting. Write at least v. 16
Most contemporary economies allow such a model of employment as being self-employed, which appears very tempting for many. However, still the vast majority of people opt for being employed in a company and not to set up their own trade. this essay will attempt to look into the key factors as to why people may prefer entrepreneur ship and major drawbacks to it. To start with, in many modern societies, including Russian, entrepreneur ship is greatly encouraged with lots of business seminars and workshops advertised. These may range from slightly fraudulent to genuinely educational and supportive, and generally any information on setting up a company is easily accessible for those who are willing. And willing they are, as being a business person, the image itself has a certain feel of luxury, respectability and success. People are being told that they have no limits and can easily become as wealthy as Steve Jobs if they wish it. This first reason is linked to the second, which is relevant to Russia and some other countries. Bank loans are acceptable too, and they are largely eagerly granted. If a future business person truly knows their work, it poses no threat. Nevertheless, easy access to setting up a company for someone inexperienced or insensible may cause a range of problems. Apparently, the first issue that may perplex an unskilled entrepreneur is the necessity to be a jack of all trades (if the company is very small). Having taken the responsibilities of an accountant, PR or HR manager at the same time can be a burden and make the person wish they had never done it at all. If they hire other people to perform these tasks, they must pay more tax and provide their employees with decent working conditions. At the same time, trade is usually a risky matter and in our competitive reality many of them go bankrupt. And last, but not least-self-employed people are the only people responsible for their own vacations, sickness or maternity leaves or any job perks. So, in a nutshell, being your own master has many downsides, that is why many people decide to play it safe.
Most contemporary economies
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allow
such a model of employment as being self-employed, which appears
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very
tempting for
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many
.
However
,
still
the vast majority of
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people
opt for
being employed
in a
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company
and not to set up their
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own
trade.
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this
essay will attempt to look into the key factors as to why
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people
may prefer entrepreneur ship and major drawbacks to it.

To
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start
with, in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
modern societies, including Russian, entrepreneur ship is
greatly
encouraged with lots of business seminars and workshops advertised. These may range from
slightly
fraudulent to
genuinely
educational and supportive, and
generally
any information on setting up a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
is
easily
accessible for those who are willing. And willing they are, as being a business person, the image itself has a certain feel of luxury, respectability and success.
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People
are being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
that they have no limits and can
easily
become as wealthy as Steve Jobs if they wish it.

This
first
reason
is linked
to the second, which is relevant to Russia and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
other countries. Bank loans are acceptable too, and they are
largely
eagerly
granted. If a future business person
truly
knows their work, it poses no threat.
Nevertheless
, easy access to setting up a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
for someone inexperienced or insensible may cause a range of problems.

Apparently
, the
first
issue that may perplex an unskilled entrepreneur is the necessity to be a jack of all trades (if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
is
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very
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small
). Having taken the responsibilities of an accountant, PR or HR manager at the same time can be a burden and
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make
the person wish they had never done it at all. If they hire other
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people
to perform these tasks, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
pay more tax and provide their employees with decent working conditions. At the same time, trade is
usually
a risky matter and in our competitive reality
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many
of them go bankrupt. And last,
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but
not least-self-employed
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people
are the
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only
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people
responsible for their
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own
vacations, sickness or maternity
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leaves
or any job perks.

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So
, in a nutshell, being your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
master has
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many
downsides,
that is
why
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many
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people
decide to play it safe.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay You had a good meal at a local restaurant with your family. Write a letter to the newspaper to tell them about it, describe the meal you had, and why you think the restaurant is worth visiting. Write at least v. 16

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
359 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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