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You had a meal at the local restaurant with your family. Write to a local newspaper to give the feedback. In your letter, you shoul saywhere the restaurant locatedwhat you had for a mealwhy do you recommend this restaurant to others. v.1

You had a meal at the local restaurant with your family. Write to a local newspaper to give the feedback. In your letter, you shoul saywhere the restaurant locatedwhat you had for a mealwhy do you recommend this restaurant to others. v. 1
Some hold the opinion that movies are better watched in the comfort of your home, on tablets or phones, while others prefer to watch films in movie theatres to get the full experience. This essay agrees that movies are better watched on electronic devices at home. Cinemas are the perfect place to view films because of the picture and sound quality. This cannot be compared to small phone or tablet screens, therefore, films are enjoyed to the utmost on the big screen. For example, seeing movies like The Avengers in 3D theatres is best watched in cinemas because the full effect of the movie can be seen. For this reason, people opt to see movies in a cinema. Even though going to the cinema is a social excursion, it can be quite expensive. Movie tickets are not cheap, and this comes with the additional cost of snacks such as popcorn and cold drinks. For a middle-class family, that is a lot of money. In comparison, homemade popcorn and drinks come to more than one third of the cost at the cinemas. Therefore, staying at home to view on your electronic device is more favourable. In addition, many people find it more convenient to watch their program at home. There is no need to dress-up and you can pause the video at any point if you need the toilet. Instead of popcorn, people can opt for heavier meals. This is an another reason why people would choose to rather watch their videos at home. In conclusion, while some believe that films are better watched in a cinema, I, among others, believe it is more convenient if viewed online.
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Some
hold the opinion that
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movies
are better
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watched
in the comfort of your home, on tablets or phones, while others prefer to
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watch
films in
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movie
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theatres
to
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get
the full experience. This essay
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agrees
that
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movies
are better
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watched
on electronic devices at home.

Cinemas are the perfect place to view films
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because
of the picture and sound quality. This cannot
be compared
to
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small
phone or tablet screens,
therefore
, films
are enjoyed
to the utmost on the
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big
screen.
For example
, seeing
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movies
like The Avengers in 3D
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theatres
is best
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watched
in
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cinemas
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because
the full effect of the
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movie
can be
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seen
.
For this reason
,
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people
opt to
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see
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movies
in a cinema.

Even though
going to the
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cinema
is a social excursion, it can be quite expensive.
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Movie
tickets are not
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cheap
, and this
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comes
with the additional cost of snacks such as popcorn and
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cold
drinks. For a middle-
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class
family,
that is
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a lot of
money.
In comparison
, homemade popcorn and drinks
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come
to more than one third of the cost at the
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cinemas
.
Therefore
, staying at home to view on your electronic device is more
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favourable
.

In addition
,
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many
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people
find it more convenient to
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watch
their program at home. There is no need to dress-up and you can pause the video at any point if you need the toilet.
Instead
of popcorn,
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people
can opt for heavier meals. This is
One of these determiners is redundant in this context. Choose only one: "a reason" or "another reason".
an another reason
why
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people
would choose to
rather
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watch
their videos at home.

In conclusion
, while
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some
believe that films are better
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watched
in a
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cinema
, I, among others, believe it is more convenient if viewed online.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay You had a meal at the local restaurant with your family. Write to a local newspaper to give the feedback. In your letter, you shoul saywhere the restaurant locatedwhat you had for a mealwhy do you recommend this restaurant to others. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
277 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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