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You visited a restaurant for a meal. You were served meat (non-veg) instead of vegetarian meal. You are very annoyed at this incident. Complain to the restaurant manager for the same. In your letter•explain your annoying experience•describe the unprofe v.1

You visited a restaurant for a meal. You were served meat (non-veg) instead of vegetarian meal. You are very annoyed at this incident. Complain to the restaurant manager for the same. In your letter•explain your annoying experience•describe the unprofe v. 1
It is commonly suggested that a person does not need education in a higher institution to acquire the skills and qualities necessary for success today. Personally, I agree with this view because a person's exposure and experience are the major determinants of success. Some people believe that the skills necessary for a successful career are only learned in the universities and colleges. This is because many successful individual acquired the knowledge and skills necessary for success through years of education and training in these institutions. For example, successful professionals in the world today, such as surgeons and engineers spent some years in the universities in order to gain essential skills. Thus, some people argue that without gaining skills and qualities from an educational institute, a person will be unsuccessful. However, most successful professionals acquired invaluable skills through experience. Over the course of their career, successful professional and entrepreneurs learn from past examples worthy of imitation. For instance, the CEO of Microsoft developed leadership qualities from experience. Thus, since these skills were obtained outside the universities or colleges, a person does not need to learn through formal education to be successful. Furthermore, a wide professional exposure is essential to be successful. Through interacting with like minds and renowned professionals, many successful people have developed skills needed in today's world. These networks are not obtained through the educational route. In conclusion, i believe that successful individuals learned vital skills through experience and networks rather than in the higher institutions. The public should be educated about this view, which will be an important guidance required in our society.
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commonly
suggested that a person does not need education in a higher institution to acquire the
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skills
and qualities necessary for success
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today
.
Personally
, I
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agree
with this view
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because
a person's exposure and
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experience
are the major determinants of success.

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Some
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people
believe that the
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skills
necessary for a
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successful
career are
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only
learned in the universities and colleges. This is
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because
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many
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successful
individual acquired the knowledge and
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skills
necessary for success
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through
years of education and training in these institutions.
For example
,
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successful
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professionals
in the world
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today
, such as surgeons and engineers spent
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some
years in the universities in order to gain essential
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skills
.
Thus
,
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some
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people
argue that without gaining
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skills
and qualities from an educational institute, a person will be unsuccessful.

However
, most
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successful
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professionals
acquired invaluable
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skills
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through
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experience
. Over the course of their career,
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successful
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professional
and entrepreneurs learn from past examples worthy of imitation.
For instance
, the CEO of Microsoft developed leadership qualities from
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experience
.
Thus
, since these
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skills
were obtained
outside the universities or colleges, a person does not need to learn
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through
formal education to be
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successful
.
Furthermore
, a wide
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professional
exposure is essential to be
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successful
.
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Through
interacting with like minds and renowned
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professionals
,
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many
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successful
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people
have developed
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skills
needed in
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today
's world. These networks are not obtained
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through
the educational route.

In conclusion
,
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i
believe that
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successful
individuals learned vital
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skills
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
through
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
and networks
rather
than in the higher institutions. The public should
be educated
about this view, which will be an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
guidance required in our society.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You visited a restaurant for a meal. You were served meat (non-veg) instead of vegetarian meal. You are very annoyed at this incident. Complain to the restaurant manager for the same. In your letter•explain your annoying experience•describe the unprofe v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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