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Some people are born to be a leader others believe that leadership can be learned Discuss both views and give your opinion v.2

Some people are born to be a leader others believe that leadership can be learned 2
Technological advancement has led to a decline in the use of physical structures where people present themselves daily for work. I am strongly of the opinion that this reduction is a good progress. Owning to the fact that the time workers use in commuting has been scrapped completely, workers are compelled to develop in the area of Information technology skills and project deliverables are achieved in lesser time. Firstly, one major improvement working from home has caused is the best use of time used in commuting. Time spent moving from home to the office is saved and is used in achieving proper work goals and objectives. The number of hours spent on the road is almost the same as the number of hours required to spend at work for workers in the very busy cities like Lagos. For example, people who work on the mainland spend an average of 6-8hours to and fro office every day. This valuable time is put into performing key tasks when working from home, also, energy is preserved and they have more zeal to give the best to their jobs. In addition to valuable time, employees are compelled to develop themselves in the use of Information technology (IT) packages. Working from home would entail sending vital details of work back and forth via the internet, therefore the need for workers to get acquainted with software that would enable them work effectively. Specific software skill development has increased over time as a result of this development. Lastly, project deliverables are now completed on time. Since it faster and efficient to work at home, project deliverables are achieved in the least possible time with minimal mistakes. An estimator who works at his comfort gets accurate measurements from plan and comes up with a near accurate bill of quantities than his colleague who still have to get to the office to work, having been worn out from the hustle of arriving at his place of work. In conclusion, I believe that this arrangement has helped many organizations as there are now better ways of doing jobs. Although it is argued that working at home tends to make one lazy, but with discipline one can overcome this attitude and achieve more.
Technological advancement has led to a decline in the
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use
of physical structures where
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people
present themselves daily for
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work
. I am
strongly
of the opinion that this reduction is a
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good
progress. Owning to the fact that the
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time
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workers
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use
in commuting has
been scrapped
completely,
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workers
are compelled
to develop in the area of Information technology
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skills
and project deliverables
are achieved
in lesser time.

Firstly
, one major improvement
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working
from home has caused is the best
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use
of
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time
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used
in commuting.
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Time
spent moving from home to the office
is saved
and is
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used
in achieving proper
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work
goals and objectives. The number of hours spent on the road is almost the same as the number of hours required to spend at
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work
for
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workers
in the
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very
busy cities like Lagos.
For example
,
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people
who
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work
on the mainland spend an average of 6-8hours to and fro office every day. This valuable
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time
is put
into performing key tasks when
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working
from home,
also
, energy is
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preserved and
they have more zeal to give the best to their jobs.

In addition
to valuable
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time
, employees
are compelled
to develop themselves in the
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use
of Information technology (IT) packages.
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Working
from home would entail sending vital
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details
of
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work
back and forth via the internet,
therefore
the need for
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workers
to
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get
acquainted with software that would enable them
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work
effectively
. Specific software
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skill
development has increased over
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time
as a result
of this development.

Lastly
, project deliverables are
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now
completed on
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time
. Since it faster and efficient to
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work
at home, project deliverables
are achieved
in the least possible
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time
with minimal mistakes. An estimator who works at his comfort
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gets
accurate measurements from plan and
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comes
up with a near accurate bill of quantities than his colleague who
still
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have to
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get
to the office to
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work
, having
been worn
out from the hustle of arriving at his place of work.

In conclusion
, I believe that this arrangement has
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helped
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many
organizations as there are
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now
better ways of doing jobs. Although it
is argued
that
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working
at home tends to
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make
one lazy,
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but
with discipline one can overcome this attitude and achieve more.
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IELTS essay Some people are born to be a leader others believe that leadership can be learned 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
372 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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