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Some people claim that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while others argue that it is wrong. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people claim that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while others argue that it is wrong. v. 2
In the today’s world, technology is very advanced compared with the previous decades. Nowadays, children have their personal mobile phones and also their busy schedule too. They spend more time watching television than they did in comparing with some past years. There are many advantages from that. The foremost is the competitive world. The today’s generation kids will too smart compare with them. They are very familiar with the gadgets in this present world. They like to watch news, discovery, crime series, national geography, brain games etc. So many shows. They like to sharpen their memory and perspicacious in nature. In contrast, the growth of them should actually have is quite lesser than those who are slightly greater than them. They do not have any interested to play the outdoor games like cricket, football, etc. They are not fit as well as healthy as compared to them. Because, of the technology is advancing the children spend a lot of time with their gadgets like iPod, x-box, cell phones, laptops, video games and in television. Moreover, they are not physically fit. Also, the obesity problem for children is highly risk factor for them. To conclude, I suggest children of the today's generation is spending their some time to play outdoor games and do other outdoor activities like cycling, walking etc. Instead of seat in their home and waste their time to watch only televisions. It will be a very huge problem for us in the future if this scenario in children will continue.
In the
today
’s world, technology is
very
advanced compared with the previous decades. Nowadays,
children
have their personal mobile phones and
also
their busy schedule too. They spend more
time
watching television than they did in
comparing
with
some
past years.

There are
many
advantages from that. The foremost is the competitive world. The
today
’s generation kids will too smart compare with them. They are
very
familiar with the gadgets in this present world. They like to
watch
news, discovery, crime series, national geography, brain
games
etc.
So
many
shows
. They like to sharpen their memory and perspicacious in nature.

In contrast
, the growth of them should actually have is quite lesser than those who are
slightly
greater than them. They do not have any interested to play the outdoor
games
like cricket, football, etc.

They are not fit
as well
as healthy as compared to them.
Because
, of the technology is advancing the
children
spend
a lot of
time
with their gadgets like iPod, x-box, cell phones, laptops, video
games
and in television.
Moreover
, they are not
physically
fit.
Also
, the obesity problem for
children
is
highly
risk
factor for them.

To conclude
, I suggest
children
of the
today
's generation is spending their
some
time
to play outdoor
games
and do other outdoor activities like cycling, walking etc.
Instead
of seat in their home and waste their
time
to
watch
only
televisions. It will be a
very
huge problem for us in the future if this scenario in
children
will continue.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people claim that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while others argue that it is wrong. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
252 words
7
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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