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You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Expl v.3

You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Expl v. 3
There is no doubt that adolescence can learn in the fast pace in early education. Although, some people think that they should get admission when it reach to seven years of age. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and explain my support for the latter view. On the one hand, those who believe early learning can be a negative impact on children in the form of stress and tension of work load. For example, In China, in the last decade, 85 percentage teenage has found severe mental stress found due to the education on the children. This is the reason parents should be more concern about the children better well being and, rather than giving unusual burden on the youngsters. As a result, they can enjoy their life which makes them healthier, if we provide opportunity engage in the entertainment and physical activities by own choice. However, my view is that in this fast developing world new special curriculum introduce to the earlier children, which help them to create a solid building block. For instance, there are many under the age of 10 years Microsoft certificate in the western countries and these numbers growing in the current trend. Therefore, children can learn particular skills based on their interest which they will innovate with the help of teachers, parents and also apply in the daily routine life such as communicating skills, arts and soon on. In conclusion, despite the workload overhead on the children, it is my firm belief that early childhood schooling plays a vital role in the carrier growth with the advancement in the primary school system.
There is no doubt that adolescence can learn in the
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fast
pace in early education. Although,
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some
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people
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think
that they should
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get
admission when it
Did you mean "reaches"?
reach
to seven years of age. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and
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explain
my support for the latter view.

On the one hand, those who believe early learning can be a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impact on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
in the form of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
and tension of work load.
For example
, In China, in the last decade, 85 percentage teenage has found severe mental
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
found due to the education on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
. This is the reason parents should be more concern about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
better
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well being
and,
rather
than giving unusual burden on the youngsters.
As a result
, they can enjoy their life which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
them healthier, if we provide opportunity engage in the entertainment and physical activities by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
choice.

However
, my view is that in this
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
developing world new special curriculum introduce to the earlier
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them to create a solid building block.
For instance
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
under the age of 10 years Microsoft certificate in the western countries and these numbers growing in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
trend.
Therefore
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
can learn particular
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
based on their interest which they will innovate with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of teachers, parents and
also
apply in the daily routine life such as communicating
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
, arts and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
on.

In conclusion
, despite the workload overhead on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
, it is my firm belief that early childhood schooling plays a vital role in the carrier growth with the advancement in the primary school system.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Expl v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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