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Many people are choosing finding information online rather than in books. Is this development positive or negative? v.1

Many people are choosing finding information online rather than in books. Is this development positive or negative? v. 1
In the recent decades, the environmental issues have become an increasingly hot topic, large amount of population concern about climate change, global warming and shortage of water. It is often argued that government and big corporation can change the situation whereas individual cannot. In my opinion, all of us should make every effort to change our habit to protect the planet. Although many people say that governments and large organization have the power and resources to improve the current situation, as the policy maker and guardian, they create anti-pollution laws and regulation to protect natural resources but ultimately rely on public support. Thus, the best way to make the world a better place for humanity is to educate people to have a responsible and respectful attitude towards the natural resources. In fact, the role of individuals in prevention of pollution is of critical importance, because it is the individuals that make a community or country. In particular, people should reduce creating waste and garbage, use green products and public transportation and eventually lower the carbon footprint. In conclusion, aware and inspired individuals are the strongest tool to deal with pollution. This is because they not only lessens the burden of the country, but also can tackle the problem of pollution more effectively as they are more familiar with problems persisting at local level. Clearly, environment protection is a practice of protecting the environment on individual, organizational, and governmental level, it should be implemented from top to bottom level so that we would have a healthy and sustainable environment to live.
In the recent decades, the environmental issues have become an
increasingly
hot topic, large amount of population concern about climate
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change
, global warming and shortage of water. It is
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often
argued that
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government
and
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big
corporation can
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change
the situation whereas
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individual
cannot. In my opinion, all of us should
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make
every effort to
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change
our habit to protect the planet.

Although
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many
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people
say that
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governments
and large organization have the power and resources to
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improve
the
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current
situation, as the
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policy maker
and guardian, they create anti-pollution laws and regulation to protect natural resources
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but
ultimately
rely on public support.
Thus
, the best way to
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make
the world a better place for humanity is to educate
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people
to have a responsible and respectful attitude towards the natural resources.

In fact, the role of
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individuals
in prevention of pollution is of critical importance,
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because
it is the
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individuals
that
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make
a community or country.
In particular
,
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people
should
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reduce
creating waste and garbage,
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use
green products and public transportation and
eventually
lower the carbon footprint.

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In
conclusion, aware and inspired
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individuals
are the strongest tool to deal with pollution. This is
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because
they not
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only
lessens the burden of the country,
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but
also
can tackle the problem of pollution more
effectively
as they are more familiar with problems persisting at local level.
Clearly
, environment protection is a practice of protecting the environment on
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individual
, organizational, and governmental level, it should
be implemented
from top to bottom level
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so
that we would have a healthy and sustainable environment to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people are choosing finding information online rather than in books. Is this development positive or negative? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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