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You recently ordered something online. When the delivery came it was not complete. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: explain what you ordered and what was missing from your deliveryexplain the importance of this deliveryask for a replacement it v.1

You recently ordered something online. When the delivery came it was not complete. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: explain what you ordered and what was missing from your deliveryexplain the importance of this deliveryask for a replacement it v. 1
Over the past few decades, people’s interest in exploring new areas and countries around the globe has become an increasing trend. The significant advancements in the field of transportation enabled mankind to cross the universe easily. Some people claim that tourists must pay more money than natives when visiting tourists and cultural places. In this essay, I will opine the reasons why I completely disagree with this idea. There is no doubt that equality in treatment inculcates a belonging spirit in the country. This similarity in hospitality regardless of the nationality, race and religion, show how well civilized this specific country is. Furthermore, tourists that feel they are a part of the native society in the foreign country are motivated to repeat the visiting experience several times. This was evidenced in a recent research conducted by the “Ministry of Tourism”. It ensures that countries such as Turkey, Greece and Cyprus experience multi visits from tourists. Moreover, charging foreigners more than locals will lead to a decline in the tourism industry. Families keen to spend memorable and exciting holidays in unique yet cheap and affordable tourism attractions. Such areas will attract more visitors, and therefore boost the tourism sector. As a consequence, this will contribute to a rise in the economic growth of the country. To illustrate, tourism in Egypt influx money that represents 55% of the total economy. This is due to the cheap services and fee entrances to rare places. In conclusion, it is un-negotiable that countries should not charge foreign visitors extra fee. However I believe that a warm, welcoming, accompanied by non-nationality prejudice will enhance the economic growth of countries.
Over the past few decades,
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people
’s interest in exploring new areas and
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countries
around the globe has become an increasing trend. The significant advancements in the field of transportation enabled mankind to cross the universe
easily
.
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Some
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people
claim that tourists
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must
pay more money than natives when visiting tourists and cultural places. In this essay, I will opine the reasons why I completely disagree with this
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idea
.

There is no doubt that equality in treatment inculcates a belonging spirit in the
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country
. This similarity in hospitality regardless of the nationality, race and religion,
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show
how well civilized this specific
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country
is.
Furthermore
, tourists that feel they are a part of the native society in the foreign
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country
are motivated
to repeat the visiting experience several times. This
was evidenced
in a recent research conducted by the “Ministry of
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Tourism”
. It ensures that
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countries
such as Turkey, Greece and Cyprus experience multi visits from tourists.

Moreover
, charging foreigners more than locals will lead to a decline in the
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tourism
industry. Families keen to spend memorable and exciting holidays in unique
yet
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cheap
and affordable
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tourism
attractions. Such areas will attract more visitors, and
therefore
boost the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
sector. As a consequence, this will contribute to a rise in the economic growth of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
. To illustrate,
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tourism
in Egypt influx money that represents 55% of the total economy. This is due to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
services and fee entrances to rare places.

In conclusion
, it is
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un-negotiable
that
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countries
should not charge foreign visitors extra fee.
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However
I believe that a warm, welcoming, accompanied by non-nationality prejudice will enhance the economic growth of
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countries
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You recently ordered something online. When the delivery came it was not complete. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: explain what you ordered and what was missing from your deliveryexplain the importance of this deliveryask for a replacement it v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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