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YOU RECENTLY ORDERED ONLINE SOMETHING. WHEN THE DELIVERY CAME IT WAS NOT COMPLETE. Write a letter to the compnay: 1) explain what you ordered and what is missing from your delivery2) explain the importance of this delivery3) ask for a replacement item to be v.1

YOU RECENTLY ORDERED ONLINE SOMETHING. WHEN THE DELIVERY CAME IT WAS NOT COMPLETE. Write a letter to the compnay: 1) explain what you ordered and what is missing from your delivery2) explain the importance of this delivery3) ask for a replacement item to be v. 1
There are various benefits of charging entrance fees to the museums, however, there are also some drawbacks to consider. Both sides will be examined in this essay. To begin, Nowadays, various museums have taken over from the historical buildings. This leads to high cost of maintenance because most of the historical buildings were built over hundred years with large scale, in some buildings need essential care to maintain the building structure or decorative. As a result of this, money from admission tickets may provide the cost of maintenance even the museums get money supported by the governments but sometimes it is not enough. Furthermore, technology of security is also beneficial from these incomes. Most of the museums in this world contain excessive and valuable items such as the painting of Mona Lisa from Davinci, to protect those priceless items, the museums need a lot of money to set up the security system. A final benefit, the museums can manage and promote their organizations better. For example, they can advertise their museums to the public due to the internet and social media, this will increase the number of visitors. However, there are several drawbacks to consider, the price of admission fees extremely expensive for foreigners, some budget travellers can’t take effort to pay the ticket of the museum. What is more, the local citizens who have limited money can’t get into the museum respectively. Free of admission charge will allow every level of people to visit and learn from the museums. In conclusion, in my opinion, there are various benefits of charging entrance fees, however, there are some drawbacks to consider too.
There are various benefits of charging entrance fees to the
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museums
,
however
, there are
also
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some
drawbacks to consider. Both sides will
be examined
in this essay.

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begin
, Nowadays, various
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museums
have taken over from the historical
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buildings
. This leads to high cost of maintenance
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because
most of the historical
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buildings
were built
over hundred years with large scale, in
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some
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buildings
need essential care to maintain the
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building
structure or decorative.
As a result
of this,
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money
from admission tickets may provide the cost of maintenance even the
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museums
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get
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money
supported by the
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governments
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but
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sometimes
it is not
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enough
.
Furthermore
, technology of security is
also
beneficial from these incomes. Most of the
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museums
in this world contain excessive and valuable items such as the painting of Mona Lisa from
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Davinci
, to protect those priceless items, the
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museums
need
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a lot of
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money
to set up the security system. A final benefit, the
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museums
can manage and promote their organizations better.
For example
, they can advertise their
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museums
to the public due to the internet and social media, this will increase the number of visitors.

However
, there are several drawbacks to consider, the price of admission fees
extremely
expensive for foreigners,
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some
budget
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travellers
can’t take effort to pay the ticket of the
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museum
.
What is more
, the local citizens who have limited
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money
can’t
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get
into the
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museum
respectively
. Free of admission charge will
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allow
every level of
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people
to visit and learn from the museums.

In conclusion
, in my opinion, there are various benefits of charging entrance fees,
however
, there are
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some
drawbacks to consider too.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay YOU RECENTLY ORDERED ONLINE SOMETHING. WHEN THE DELIVERY CAME IT WAS NOT COMPLETE. Write a letter to the compnay: 1) explain what you ordered and what is missing from your delivery2) explain the importance of this delivery3) ask for a replacement item to be v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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