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Essay topics: The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership an v.1

Essay topics: The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership an v. 1
As a consequence of globalisation and development in science and technology many works which were previously done manually are now being done mechanically. This essay will focus on the pros and cons of using machines in today's world. In earlier days when research were in their budding stage people used to do everything manually. Since there were no machines to help them in their task their efficiency and efficacy used to be compromised. Machines have many advantages in comparison. Firstly, with the development in the field of science works which were previously taking more time, now can be done in short time with the help of benefits provided by machines. Secondly, it was really difficult to meet the demands of increasing population, so it was need of hour to consider using machines for getting things done. For example, in the early 90s, it used to take days to make one saree by hands which can now be done in minutes in large scale with the help of modern instruments. But there is a disadvantage to the complete shift from manual labour to machines. It has affected the artisans and labourers badly. People who were completely dependent on their labour are forced to suffer because of machines taking their place. For instance, daily wage labourers who used to struggle in farms and earn their livelihood by cutting and sowing have been replaced by sowing machines and threshers. So, in conclusion, my opinion is that even though machines are more efficient and effective, but it should not lead to the sufferings of people who are completely dependent on manual labour. Government should take proper measures like helping people to develop intellectual skills and giving more importance and limelight to artisans work in order to decrease suicide rates and poverty as well so that nobody has to die with hunger.
As a consequence of
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globalisation
and development in science and technology
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many
works which were previously done
manually
are
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now
being done
mechanically
. This essay will focus on the pros and cons of using
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machines
in
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today
's world.

In earlier days when research were in their budding stage
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people
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used
to do everything
manually
. Since there were no
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machines
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them in their task their efficiency and efficacy
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to
be compromised
.
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Machines
have
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many
advantages
in comparison
.
Firstly
, with the development in the field of science works which were previously taking more time,
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now
can
be done
in short time with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of benefits provided by
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machines
.
Secondly
, it was
really
difficult to
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meet
the demands of increasing population,
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so
it
was need
of hour to consider using
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machines
for getting things done.
For example
, in the early 90s, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to take days to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
one saree by hands which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
be done
in minutes in large scale with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of modern instruments.

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But
there is a disadvantage to the complete shift from manual
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labour
to
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machines
. It has
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affected
the artisans and
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labourers
badly
.
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People
who were completely dependent on their
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labour
are forced
to suffer
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because
of
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machines
taking their place.
For instance
, daily wage
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labourers
who
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used
to struggle in farms and earn their livelihood by cutting and sowing have
been replaced
by sowing
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machines
and threshers.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
,
in conclusion
, my opinion is that
even though
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machines
are more efficient and effective,
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but
it should not lead to the sufferings of
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people
who are completely dependent on manual
Possible spelling mistake. 'labour' is British English.
labour
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
should take proper measures like helping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to develop intellectual
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and giving more importance and limelight to artisans work in order to decrease suicide rates and poverty
as well
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so
that nobody
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has to
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die
with hunger.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Essay topics: The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership an v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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