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You recently hired a restaurant to host an office party at work, but there were several problems with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: Give details of the food and services you orderedDescribe the problems t v.1

You recently hired a restaurant to host an office party at work, but there were several problems with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: Give details of the food and services you orderedDescribe the problems t v. 1
Intrinsic genius in achieving success in a certain sport has been of paramount importance for some renowned sports people. Yet, there are some disagreement as to whether inherent talents are the prominent element in this case or hard work can have an extraordinary effect on. While there are some certain valid arguments to the contrary, it seems to me that proportion of practice far outweigh talent’s one. First of all, it is an indisputable fact that regular and purposeful work thrive to accomplishment in any field and in order to be successful in a sport there is no other way. Although, for instance, a given height may be required to become a prefect volleyball player, everyone is tall cannot definitely an experienced player in this sport. To convert to a competent and to follow a profession way of life in the sports-world, not only doing practice hardly with a high standard schedule under a coach’s supervision is crucial but also it can compensate the lack of natural traits. Athletes with disabilities who have won numerous victories and gold medals in their championships are excellent representations of professional sports people. They have usually gained these achievements by trying and with their perseverance rather than brilliance. Further and even more importantly, having a prepared body in physical term is a fundamental aspect of being an athlete, specifically a famous one for whom sport is their main job. To reach this ambitious, practice is indispensable, whereas a gift for sports may play a role as an obstacle. It may give individuals over confidence, therefore, failure to attain triumph is a predictable result on the ground that they conceive that they are the best because of their specific genetic features so do not need other means, especially hard work. By way of conclusion, while intrinsic talents can accelerate achieving success in particular sportsport, as far as my concerned, the ratio of regular practice to talent to gain outstanding achievement in professional sports is twofold
Intrinsic genius in achieving success in a certain
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sport
has been of paramount importance for
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some
renowned
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sports
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people
.
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, there are
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some
disagreement
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as to whether
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talents
are the prominent element
in this case
or
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hard
work can have an extraordinary effect on. While there are
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some
certain valid arguments to the contrary, it seems to me that proportion of
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practice
far outweigh
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talent’s
one.

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First of all
, it is an indisputable fact that regular and purposeful work thrive to accomplishment in any field and in order to be successful in a
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sport
there is no other way. Although,
for instance
, a
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given
height may
be required
to become a prefect volleyball player, everyone is tall cannot definitely an experienced player in this
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sport
. To convert to a competent and to follow a profession way of life in the sports-world, not
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only
doing
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practice
hardly with a high standard schedule under a coach’s supervision is crucial
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but
also
it can compensate the lack of natural traits. Athletes with disabilities who have won numerous victories and gold medals in their championships are excellent representations of professional
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sports
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people
. They have
usually
gained these achievements by trying and with their perseverance
rather
than brilliance.

Further
and even more
importantly
, having a prepared body in physical term is a fundamental aspect of being an athlete,
specifically
a
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famous
one for whom
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sport
is their main job. To reach this ambitious,
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practice
is indispensable, whereas a gift for
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sports
may play a role as an obstacle. It may give individuals over confidence,
therefore
, failure to attain triumph is a predictable result on the ground that they conceive that they are the best
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because
of their specific genetic features
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so
do not need other means,
especially
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hard
work.

By way of conclusion, while intrinsic
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talents
can accelerate achieving success
in particular
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sportsport
, as far as my concerned, the ratio of regular
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practice
to
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talent
to gain outstanding achievement in professional
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sports
is twofold
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IELTS essay You recently hired a restaurant to host an office party at work, but there were several problems with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: Give details of the food and services you orderedDescribe the problems t v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
7.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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