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You need to take leave from your work of over one month for personal reasons Write a letter to your boss In your letter Explain the reason for the leave and the length of leave you need Explain how you will keep up to date while you are away Suggest how y v.1

You need to take leave from your work of over one month for personal reasons Write a letter to your boss In your letter Explain the reason for the leave and the length of leave you need Explain how you will keep up to date while you are away Suggest how y v. 1
There are increasing number of languages disappearing by the year. People believe that this occurrence is not important as their life will become simpler as a result of this phenomenon. I completely disagree with this opinion and this essay will elaborate on the reasons why. Firstly, language serves as a backbone of any culture in a society. If a language were to vanish, the culture and practices will diminish with it as well. Culture is important to a society as it is essential to preserving the uniqueness and diversity of our civilisation. If these languages were to die out, I believe that the livelihoods of these people will greatly be affected as they will now need to learn a new mother tongue and adapt to a brand new culture. Should such an event happen, various small communities in China and India who speak minority languages will face these difficulties in adjusting to the changes. Secondly, I believe that the complexities of life are not caused by the multitude of languages that exist in the world, but rather in the gap in communication that arises from factors such as the lack of respect for one another and inconsideration in one’s daily activities. For instance, we could place two people in a room who respect each other mutually that speak completely different languages, but they would still be able to get along very well. On the other hand, it could also be observed that two people who speak the same language may very well end up in a dispute. To summarize, I believe that life will only become more simplified when mankind shows the resolve to bridge the gap in their everyday communication. Having fewer languages is not part of the problem and will not aid in making our lives easier. On the contrary, it could produce an opposite effect as people may find trouble coping with the changes should this situation happen.
There are increasing number of
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languages
disappearing by the year.
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People
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believe
that this occurrence is not
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important
as their life will become simpler
as a result
of this phenomenon. I completely disagree with this opinion and this essay will elaborate on the reasons why.

Firstly
,
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language
serves as a backbone of any
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culture
in a society. If a
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language
were to vanish, the
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culture
and practices will diminish with it
as well
.
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Culture
is
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important
to a society as it is essential to
Did you mean "preserve"?
preserving
the uniqueness and diversity of our
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civilisation
. If these
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languages
were to
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die
out, I
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believe
that the livelihoods of these
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people
will
greatly
be
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affected
as they will
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now
need to learn a new mother tongue and adapt to a
'brand new' seems to be a compound adjective in front of a noun. Use a hyphen: "brand-new".
brand new
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culture
. Should such an
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event
happen, various
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small
communities in China and India who speak minority
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languages
will face these difficulties in adjusting to the
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changes
.

Secondly
, I
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believe
that the complexities of life are not caused by the multitude of
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languages
that exist in the world,
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but
rather
in the gap in communication that arises from factors such as the lack of respect for one another and inconsideration in one’s daily activities.
For instance
, we could place two
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people
in a room who respect each other
mutually
that speak completely
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different
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languages
,
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but
they would
still
be able to
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get
along
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very
well.
On the other hand
, it could
also
be observed
that two
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people
who speak the same
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language
may
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very
well
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end
up in a dispute.

To summarize
, I
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believe
that life will
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only
become more simplified when mankind
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
the resolve to bridge the gap in their everyday communication. Having fewer
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languages
is not part of the problem and will not aid in making our
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lives
easier.
On the contrary
, it could produce an opposite effect as
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people
may find trouble coping with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
should this situation happen.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You need to take leave from your work of over one month for personal reasons Write a letter to your boss In your letter Explain the reason for the leave and the length of leave you need Explain how you will keep up to date while you are away Suggest how y v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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