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You are currently running a course and have a part-time job. Your boss suggested that you leave your course and work full time. Write a letter to your boss. In the letter, you should: tell him/her your decisionexplain the reason for your decision. v.1

You are currently running a course and have a part-time job. Your boss suggested that you leave your course and work full time. Write a letter to your boss. In the letter, you should: tell him/her your decisionexplain the reason for your decision. v. 1
People have different views on the use of artificial intelligence. While some people consider AI as a huge threat, I believe that AI could make a great contribution to society. The main reason why people worry about the situation that AI developments may surpass human intelligence is that the human workforce would be replaced by AI computers, especially in some simple repeatable tasks such as packing and storage. Some companies, for example, Amazon and Google have used this kind of AI equipment for years, and many workers have been laid off, and end up in a miserable situation. If the unemployment rate continues to go up, problems related to poverty and crime is certainly becoming an unstable bomb in society. To avoid this happening, supporters who are against AI argue that we should stop developing this technology. In spite of the risks mentioned above, I believe that AI could add many benefits to human society and bring people up to another level of life experience. First of all, these AI machines can do many tasks that humans cannot do or prefer not to do. Moreover, AI technology can act as extended eyes for humans, helping humans to see beyond boundaries. To illustrate this, an AI technology, which is created and programmed by IBM, has been used for mineral exploration in the mining industry. By introducing AI technology in this field, the efficiency and productivity of mining have improved, and the incidence of injury from works has certainly decreased. In conclusion, although some people argue that AI machines could have negative consequences, in my view, advancements in AI technology could be a blessing to human society.
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of artificial intelligence. While
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people
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The main reason why
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people
worry about the situation that AI developments may surpass
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human
intelligence is that the
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workforce would
be replaced
by AI computers,
especially
in
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some
simple repeatable tasks such as packing and storage.
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companies
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for example
, Amazon and Google have
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used
this kind of AI equipment for years, and
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many
workers have
been laid
off, and
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end
up in a miserable situation. If the unemployment rate continues to go up, problems related to poverty and crime is
certainly
becoming an unstable bomb in society. To avoid this happening, supporters who are against AI argue that we should
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stop
developing this technology.

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risks
mentioned above, I believe that AI could
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benefits to
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society and bring
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up to another level of life experience.
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tasks that
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humans
cannot do or prefer not to do.
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, AI
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technology
can act as extended eyes for
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humans
, helping
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humans
to
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see
beyond boundaries. To illustrate this, an AI
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technology
, which
is created
and programmed by IBM, has been
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used
for mineral exploration in the mining industry. By introducing AI
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technology
in this field, the efficiency and productivity of mining have
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improved
, and the incidence of injury from works has
certainly
decreased.

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, although
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some
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people
argue that AI machines could have
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negative
consequences, in my view, advancements in AI
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technology
could be a blessing to
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human
society.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You are currently running a course and have a part-time job. Your boss suggested that you leave your course and work full time. Write a letter to your boss. In the letter, you should: tell him/her your decisionexplain the reason for your decision. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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