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You must prepare a final project. Which style would you prefer: a) giving a class presentationb)design a posterc) write an essay v.1

You must prepare a final project. Which style would you prefer: a) giving a class presentationb)design a posterc) write an essay v. 1
It is widely thought that every student might manage their academic activities during the university. Whereas, others take a different point of view and think that they should only be focused on studying important courses for the future like those related to science and technology. In my opinion, I believe that although there are courses that need to be studied, since they are more beneficial in a long-term period than others, overall students should select those subjects in what they are interested on. A growing body of research suggests that studying freely have a positive effect on students who want to obtain a degree in the university. This point is explained by the fact that students who choose their courses can be more motivated, it means they can dedicate more hours to study and research. Taking Sweden as an example, universities provide a wide amount of elective courses and graduated professionals from Swedish universities are recognized around the world as one of the best. However, it is important to think about the courses students must learn in order to use them in the future. In many cases, companies require experts who had a strong knowledge in science and technology, since those will be useful to face further tasks at work. For instance, a recent survey showed that enterprises prefer hiring professionals who have a solid background in science and technology. In conclusion, choosing courses can encourage students to do their best, nevertheless imposing subjects can benefit their performance at work. I strongly believe that students should feel free to study whatever they prefer.
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thought
that every
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student
might manage their academic activities during the
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university
. Whereas, others take a
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different
point of view and
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think
that they should
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only
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on studying
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important
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courses
for the future like those related to science and technology. In my opinion, I believe that although there are
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courses
that need to
be studied
, since they are more beneficial in a long-term period than others,
overall
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students
should select those subjects in what they
are interested
on.

A growing body of research suggests that studying
freely
have a
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positive
effect on
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students
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who
want to obtain a degree in the
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university
. This point is
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explained
by the fact that
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students
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who
choose their
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courses
can be more motivated, it means they can dedicate more hours to study and research. Taking Sweden as an example,
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universities
provide a wide amount of elective
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courses
and graduated professionals from Swedish
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universities
are recognized
around the world as one of the best.

However
, it is
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important
to
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think
about the
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courses
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students
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must
learn in order to
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use
them in the future. In
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many
cases,
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companies
require experts
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who
had
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "strong knowledge".
a strong knowledge
in science and technology, since those will be useful to face
further
tasks at work.
For instance
, a recent survey
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showed
that enterprises prefer hiring professionals
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who
have a solid background in science and technology.

In conclusion
, choosing
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courses
can encourage
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students
to do their best,
nevertheless
imposing subjects can benefit their performance at work. I
strongly
believe that
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students
should feel free to study whatever they prefer.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You must prepare a final project. Which style would you prefer: a) giving a class presentationb)design a posterc) write an essay v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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