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You must prepare a final project. Which style would you prefer: a) giving a class presentationb)design a posterc) write an essay v.2

You must prepare a final project. Which style would you prefer: a) giving a class presentationb)design a posterc) write an essay v. 2
Whenever I had a choice how to present my work to someone I always choose giving a clearly made presentation, even at my classes or at my workplace. Hence, in this question I would definitely choose giving a class presentation because it has a lot of advantages and is easier choice for me. I have three reason why I chose preparing presentation for class. First of all, comparing to an essay, presentation gives specific, academic information in less time with efficiently by saving readers time. Also, in my opinion, people tend to understand things easily when things explained by someone else because during explanation listeners can ask questions that brought doubt for them and found their answer in short period. For example, in my academic year, I usually got B' s in most essay but when I give a presentation I usually get A' s because I express my idea better in presentation and audience understand well in this way. Secondly, to deliver sufficient information, preparing the poster is not good idea for me. However, poster could give the most crucial information, some ideas would excluded due to limited space or may be some ideas might require oral explanation. Hence, to deliver clear thought and understanding about work presenting is always good idea for me. Last but not least, besides introducing the final project to class, presenting improves my skill of expressing idea in public which is one of the essential skill in future that individual should have. Especially, nowadays, the most companies looking for a person who can express their idea fully in front of public or co-workers so that he or she will be evaluated. In conclusion, introducing final work by giving presentation is beneficial for both presenter and audience. Therefore, If I were given this choice, I will always choose to preparing presentation because of its advantages.
Whenever I had a choice how to present my work to someone I always choose giving a
clearly
made
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presentation
, even at my classes or at my workplace.
Hence
, in this question I would definitely choose
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giving
a
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presentation
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because
it has
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a lot of
advantages and is easier choice for me. I have three reason why I chose preparing
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presentation
for
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class
.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, comparing to an essay,
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presentation
gives specific, academic information in less time with
efficiently
by saving readers time.
Also
, in my opinion,
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people
tend to understand things
easily
when things
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explained
by someone else
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because
during explanation listeners can ask questions that brought
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doubt for
them and found their answer in short period.
For example
, in my academic year, I
usually
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when I give a
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A&
#039; s
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I express my
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idea
better in
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presentation
and audience understand well in this way.

Secondly
, to deliver sufficient information, preparing the poster is not
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good
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idea
for me.
However
, poster could give the most crucial information,
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some
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ideas
would
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excluded
due to limited space or may be
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some
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ideas
might require oral explanation.
Hence
, to deliver
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clear
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thought
and understanding about work presenting is always
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good
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idea
for me.

Last
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but
not least,
besides
introducing the final project to
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class
, presenting
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improves
my
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skill
of expressing
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idea
in public which is one of the essential
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skill
in future that individual should have.
Especially
, nowadays, the most
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companies
looking for a person who can express their
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idea
fully
in front of public or co-workers
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that he or she will
be evaluated
.

In conclusion
, introducing final work by giving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
presentation
is beneficial for both presenter and audience.
Therefore
, If I were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
this choice, I will always choose to preparing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
presentation
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of its advantages.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay You must prepare a final project. Which style would you prefer: a) giving a class presentationb)design a posterc) write an essay v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
310 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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