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You just returned from your travel. Your friend had lent you a tour guidebook. Write a letter and say- Why was it helpful for you? - tell them about your travel- When will you return this book? v.1

You just returned from your travel. Your friend had lent you a tour guidebook. Write a letter and say- Why was it helpful for you? - tell them about your travel- When will you return this book? v. 1
It is universally acknowledged that neighbours are the necessary part of each and every individual's life. If a difficult situation arises, then the neighbours come forward to help. However, nowadays masses do not chit- chat with their neighbours whereas this harms societies. Let us delve deeper and understand the actual reasons behind this problem and remedies to tackle it. To begin with, there are multifarious causes related to the problem that why people do not gossip with their neighbours. Firstly, in this modern era due to advancement in technology folks prefer mobile phones to stay in touch with their near ones. Hence, they are just taking full advantage of mobiles. For instance, video calls, messages, audio calls. Secondly, due to hectic schedule people do not have enough time to meet their neighbours. As, dwellers are doing jobs, some of them are doing night shifts. Whenever they are planning to interact with the neighbours, they are not available. Last but not least, in the past children used to play outdoor games with their friends, but these days youngster's are playing online games in their homes, therefore, they are turning into introverts. On the other hand, there are several ways to tackle this situation. The prime one is that the government should reduce the workload of the masses. For example, by providing holidays or by reducing working hours, so on. As a result of this, people will get sufficient time to spend with their families and they will start to know their neighbours. Further, parents should focus on children's development. They should stop their little ones from using online games. This is the sole duty of the guardians to motivate them towards more physical games. For example, football, cricket, basketball, so on. In conclusion, it is difficult to find time for neighbours because of numerous reasons, whereas efforts shall be made to create a bond with them as they are our extended family.
It is
universally
acknowledged that
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neighbours
are the necessary part of each and every individual's life. If a difficult situation arises, then the
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neighbours
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come
forward to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
.
However
, nowadays masses do not chit- chat with their
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neighbours
whereas this harms societies.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
us delve deeper and understand the actual reasons behind this problem and remedies to tackle it.

To
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begin
with, there are multifarious causes related to the problem that why
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
do not gossip with their
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neighbours
.
Firstly
, in this modern era due to advancement in technology folks prefer mobile phones to stay in touch with their near
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ones
.
Hence
, they are
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just
taking full advantage of mobiles.
For instance
, video calls, messages, audio calls.
Secondly
, due to hectic schedule
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people
do not have
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enough
time to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
their
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neighbours
. As, dwellers are doing jobs,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
of them are doing night shifts. Whenever they are planning to interact with the
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neighbours
, they are not available. Last
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but
not least, in the past children
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to play outdoor
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games
with their friends,
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but
these
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days
Did you mean the plural instead of the possessive?
youngster's
are playing online
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games
in their homes,
therefore
, they are turning into introverts.

On the other hand
, there are several ways to tackle this situation. The prime one is that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the workload of the masses.
For example
, by providing holidays or by reducing working hours,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on.
As a result
of this,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
sufficient time to spend with their
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
families and
they will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to know their
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neighbours
.
Further
, parents should focus on children's development. They should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
their
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ones
from using online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
. This is the sole duty of the guardians to motivate them towards more physical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
.
For example
, football, cricket, basketball,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on.

In conclusion
, it is difficult to find time for
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neighbours
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of numerous reasons, whereas efforts shall
be made
to create a bond with them as they are our extended family.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You just returned from your travel. Your friend had lent you a tour guidebook. Write a letter and say- Why was it helpful for you? - tell them about your travel- When will you return this book? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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