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10. A while ago you have lent a friend a suitcase, which he/she has not returned yet. Write a letter to him/her reminding to bring it back and say-What suitcase and when dud he/she borrow it? -Why do you need it back? -What should he/she do about it? v.1

10. A while ago you have lent a friend a suitcase, which he/she has not returned yet. Write a letter to him/her reminding to bring it back and say-What suitcase and when dud he/she borrow it? -Why do you need it back? -What should he/she do about it? v. 1
One of the most controversial issues these days is whether governments of various countries should avoid spending on public celebrations. Since I believe such activities are vital for a country’s customs and traditions, I disagree with this notion. To begin with, some people argue that public celebrations are a waste of government resources, especially in monetary terms. They believe such events have no gain and do not contribute to the development of a country; instead, they burden the national treasury. The proponents of this argument state, a country should focus more on its vulnerable areas and allocate funds to improve the dire conditions of its underdeveloped regions rather than spending lavishly on celebrations. Thus, it is clear why people disagree to extravagant government spending’s on national events. Meanwhile, the publicly celebrated events are unique to every country and are a strong indicator of their culture, tradition, and history. In addition, such celebrations have proved to boost the tourism industry. As people travel to other countries to experience different cultures, there is no better way than to plan a visit when public celebrations are in full swing in a host country. For example, 23rd March is publicly celebrated in my country. This day has great significance in the independence of Pakistan; therefore, a national parade is conducted every year with participants from all over Pakistan. People from nearby countries come to enjoy this parade, and it is a great learning experience for the future generations as well. Therefore, it is easy to see why public celebrations are necessary. Having discussed the most pertinent points of the issue, I feel the only logical conclusion is that spending on public celebrations is important for a country. Since the expenses on public celebrations are a drop in the ocean compared to other projects, even if the government ceases to fund such events and shifts that money to solve other issues it would not move the needle.
One of the most controversial issues these days is whether
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governments
of various
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countries
should avoid
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spending
on
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public
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celebrations
. Since I believe such activities are vital for a
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country’s
customs and traditions, I disagree with this notion.

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begin
with,
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some
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people
argue that
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public
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celebrations
are a waste of
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government
resources,
especially
in monetary terms. They believe such
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events
have no gain and do not contribute to the development of a
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country
;
instead
, they burden the national treasury. The proponents of this argument state, a
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country
should focus more on its vulnerable areas and allocate funds to
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improve
the dire conditions of its underdeveloped regions
rather
than
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spending
lavishly
on
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celebrations
.
Thus
, it is
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clear
why
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people
disagree to extravagant
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government
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spending’s
on national
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events
.

Meanwhile, the
publicly
celebrated
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events
are unique to every
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country
and are a strong indicator of their culture, tradition, and history.
In addition
, such
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celebrations
have proved to boost the tourism industry. As
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people
travel to other
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countries
to experience
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different
cultures, there is no better way than to plan a visit when
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public
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celebrations
are in full swing in a host
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country
.
For example
, 23rd March is
publicly
celebrated in my
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country
. This day has great significance in the independence of Pakistan;
therefore
, a national parade
is conducted
every year with participants from all over Pakistan.
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People
from nearby
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countries
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come
to enjoy this parade, and it is a great learning experience for the future generations
as well
.
Therefore
, it is easy to
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see
why
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public
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celebrations
are necessary.

Having discussed the most pertinent points of the issue, I feel the
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only
logical conclusion is that
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spending
on
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public
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celebrations
is
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important
for a
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country
. Since the expenses on
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public
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celebrations
are a drop in the ocean compared to other projects, even if the
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government
ceases to fund such
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events
and shifts that money to solve other issues it would not
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move
the needle.
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IELTS essay 10. A while ago you have lent a friend a suitcase, which he/she has not returned yet. Write a letter to him/her reminding to bring it back and say-What suitcase and when dud he/she borrow it? -Why do you need it back? -What should he/she do about it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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