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You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks. Which country would you like to visit? v.4

You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks. Which country would you like to visit? v. 4
I like to travel and in my opinion, this enhances my experiences and broaden my horizon. I think travelling is a great opportunity to meet new people, gain more knowledge and experience, and learn new customs and traditions. I did not travel a lot yet, but I am sure I will have a chance to do it. So, if I had the opportunity to visit a foreign country I would visit Egypt. I think it is a great and very interesting country with a marvellous history. In the following paragraphs, I will give some reasons to support my choice. First of all, I have always dreamed visiting different Egyptian pyramids. My aunt visited Egypt a few years ago. She was very excited after that trip and said that she would return there one more time at any cost. She said that Egypt had impressed her very much with its glorious pyramids and ancient buildings. Second of all, I think that in that country one can touch history, feel the hard breath of workers building a pyramid under the parching sun, and see the chain of camels walking in the desert with the huge trunks full of presents for Cleopatra on their humps. Finally, I want to see a real dessert and ride the camel. All my friends who rode the camel say that it is an unforgettable experience. I believe that I will have a chance to visit this beautiful country someday. Unfortunately, now I have plenty of plans and things to do, so, I am afraid that I will not be able to travel for the next two years. I want to finish my education and then find a job, and these things have higher priority than travelling. My husband wants to visit this country too and we made an agreement to make our trip to Egypt in our five years anniversary which is in two years. In conclusion, I want to add that after my trip to Egypt I will definitely visit Australia. This country is the second one on my list the most wanted to see.
I like to travel and in my opinion, this enhances my experiences and broaden my horizon. I
think
travelling is a great opportunity to
meet
new
people
, gain more knowledge and experience, and learn new customs and traditions.
I
did not travel a lot
yet
,
but
I am sure I will have a chance to do it.
So, if
I had the opportunity to
visit
a foreign
country
I would
visit
Egypt. I
think
it is a great and
very
interesting
country
with a
marvellous
history. In the following paragraphs, I will give
some
reasons to support my choice.

First of all
, I have always dreamed visiting
different
Egyptian pyramids. My aunt visited Egypt a few years ago. She was
very
excited after that trip and said that she would return there one more time at any cost. She said that Egypt had impressed her
very
much with its glorious pyramids and ancient buildings. Second of all, I
think
that in that
country
one can touch history, feel the
hard
breath of workers building a pyramid under the parching sun, and
see
the chain of camels walking in the desert with the huge trunks full of presents for Cleopatra on their humps.
Finally
, I
want
to
see
a real
dessert
and ride the camel. All my friends who rode the camel say that it is an unforgettable experience.

I believe that I will have a chance to
visit
this
beautiful
country
someday. Unfortunately,
now
I have
plenty
of plans and things to do,
so
, I am afraid that I will not be able to travel for the
next
two years. I
want
to finish my education and then find a job, and these things have higher priority than travelling. My husband
wants
to
visit
this
country
too and
we made an agreement to
make
our trip to Egypt in our five years anniversary which is in two years.

In conclusion
, I
want
to
add
that after my trip to Egypt I will definitely
visit
Australia. This
country
is the second one on my list the most wanted to
see
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks. Which country would you like to visit? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
349 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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