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It is widely believed that children of different levels of intelligence should be taught together, while others think that more intelligent children should be taught separately. v.2

It is widely believed that children of different levels of intelligence should be taught together, while others think that more intelligent children should be taught separately. v. 2
Separating students by their level of intelligent is suggested by some experts. Yet, taking this idea into practice is still a controversial issue. Some people claim that it is much more justified for genius pupils, whilst other perspective rejects this suggestion and persists on the idea of unseparated schools. Personally, I do believe that all pupils should be taught in the same group. It is thought that separating children by the factor of intelligence could have better consequences. If the students being segregated, teachers have more capability to teach subjects in higher levels and this wouldn`t make classes monotonous for good students. In particular, mathematic classes could be an interesting class which is broadening the horizons of intelligent pupils in the case of separation. Although in one view separating student is an advisable project, others, on the hand, believe that not only is this idea broadcasting the hopeless among regular students, but also it refers the share of nurture in education. What makes a pupil a prosperous student is a stimulating environment in school and it is possible by some education of both genius and ordinary children. In the other words, if the students do not being separated, the feel of competitiveness will definitely help their promotion. To conclude, all the above-mentioned points are in my own perspective rarely do segregation of children influence on positive ways if the whole students are taken into account.
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by their level of intelligent
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into practice is
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claim that it is much more justified for genius
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, whilst other perspective rejects this suggestion and persists on the
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idea
of
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unseparated
schools.
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, I do believe that all
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should
be taught
in the same group.

It is
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thought
that separating children by the factor of intelligence could have better consequences. If the
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students
being segregated
, teachers have more capability to teach subjects in higher levels and this
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wouldn`t
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make
classes monotonous for
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good
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students
.
In particular
, mathematic classes could be an interesting
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class
which is broadening the horizons of intelligent
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pupils
in the case of separation.

Although in one view separating
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student
is an advisable project, others, on the hand, believe that not
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only
is this
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idea
broadcasting the hopeless among regular
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students
,
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but
also
it refers the share of nurture in education. What
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makes
a
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pupil
a prosperous
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student
is a stimulating environment in school and it is possible by
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some
education of both genius and ordinary children. In the other words, if the
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students
do not
being separated
, the feel of competitiveness will definitely
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help
their promotion.

To conclude
, all the above-mentioned points are in my
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own
perspective rarely do segregation of children influence on
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positive
ways if the whole
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students
are taken
into account.
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IELTS essay It is widely believed that children of different levels of intelligence should be taught together, while others think that more intelligent children should be taught separately. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
235 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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