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Some people think that universities should not provide so much theoretical knowledge but give more practical training throughout their courses. v.1

Some people think that universities should not provide so much theoretical knowledge but give more practical training throughout their courses. v. 1
In the past, a majority of academics have held the opinion that universities should only offer a theoretically-based approach to teaching throughout their courses, as opposed to the relatively recent trend towards the empirical acquisition of knowledge involving more “hands on” experience. Is this the most effective way for students to learn vital academic information while undertaking their degrees? Undoubtedly, advantages and disadvantages of both academic learning styles have to be evaluated. Firstly, on the one hand, despite being the more traditional educational approach, learning from theory in relevant academic discourses to identify established knowledge allows us to gain a professional insight. For example, students can easily identify facts and opinions from past discourses. In addition, students acquire knowledge more easily when given relative theoretical examples to build upon. For instance, in subjects such as history or sociology, studying textbook examples allows students to unravel complex academic theories which they could expand on. Alternatively, there are some disadvantages for students. On the other hand, there is no doubt that students could find themselves reading tedious and monotonous academic papers. For instance, university degrees involving the evaluation of numerous ‘long-winded’ academic discourses provide a little inspiration for students, discouraging enthusiasm. Obviously, interest can be stimulated through empirical research in class. By this, I mean that ‘the human brain learns best by doing’. Although time-consuming, there is no substitute for learning from making mistakes. In conclusion, while both approaches have benefits and drawbacks in our ever-changing academic world, I honestly believe that a more practical approach promotes a stronger acquisition of academic knowledge. In spite of the comprehensive nature which theoretical teaching can possibly provide, practical learning equals more positive learning for future generations.
In the past, a majority of
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academics
have held the opinion that universities should
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only
offer a
theoretically
-based
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approach
to teaching throughout their courses, as opposed to the
relatively
recent trend towards the empirical acquisition of
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knowledge
involving more “hands on” experience. Is this the most effective way for
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students
to learn vital
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academic
information while undertaking their degrees?
Undoubtedly
, advantages and disadvantages of both
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academic
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learning
styles
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have to
be evaluated
.

Firstly
, on the one hand, despite being the more traditional educational
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approach
,
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learning
from theory in relevant
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academic
discourses to identify established
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knowledge
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allows
us to gain a professional insight.
For example
,
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students
can
easily
identify facts and opinions from past discourses.
In addition
,
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students
acquire
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knowledge
more
easily
when
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given
relative theoretical examples to build upon.
For instance
, in subjects such as history or sociology, studying textbook examples
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allows
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students
to unravel complex
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academic
theories which they could expand on.
Alternatively
, there are
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some
disadvantages for students.

On the other hand
, there is no doubt that
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students
could find themselves reading tedious and monotonous
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academic
papers.
For instance
, university degrees involving the evaluation of numerous ‘long-winded’
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academic
discourses provide a
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little
inspiration for
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students
, discouraging enthusiasm.
Obviously
, interest can
be stimulated
through empirical research in
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class
. By this, I mean that ‘the human brain learns best by doing’. Although time-consuming, there is no substitute for
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learning
from making mistakes.

In conclusion
, while both
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approaches
have benefits and drawbacks in our ever-changing
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academic
world, I
honestly
believe that a more practical
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approach
promotes a stronger acquisition of
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academic
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knowledge
.
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In spite of
the comprehensive nature which theoretical teaching can
possibly
provide, practical
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learning
equals more
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positive
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learning
for future generations.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that universities should not provide so much theoretical knowledge but give more practical training throughout their courses. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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