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You have seen an advertisement in your local newspaper for a hotel receptionist Write a letter of application to the hotel manager Write about your experience and qualifications and say why you would like the job Also state when you would be available for v.1

You have seen an advertisement in your local newspaper for a hotel receptionist Write a letter of application to the hotel manager Write about your experience and qualifications and say why you would like the job Also state when you would be available for v. 1
Nowadays, modernisation defines how technology can be a powerful tool and this has changed the way young people used to perceive their position in a society. The younger group is far more motivated by the technological transformation, thus giving them the power over the past young generations. This essay will discuss some reasons why this is happening in today's world and how this development impacts their relationship with the elder people. To begin with, youngsters are fit for the jobs that require technological soundness. They tend to be curious about the modern changes, therefore they are more likely to adapt to it. Due to this adjustment process, they invest their time learning and applying, to institutions that can provide opportunities for them. Furthermore, present young generations are enthusiastic, thus they are more observant with the changes on how this transformation helps the society. Second, they are physically fit for the job, since this change result in tons of stress. Numerous studies show that today's individuals can still be productive with only four to six hours of sleep. Since they invest more of their time in research and discovering new ideas, then they are more capable of handling bigger responsibilities compared to the previous young generations and present older generation. Moreover, past youngsters were more focus on their families and the commitment but this is not the case today. Youngsters are becoming entrepreneurs and using their knowledge to become successful. On the contrary, this transformation may create a negative impact on the relationship between the old and young group. For example, young people may create distant relationships with the older generation, since they know that they are ahead in terms of learning and adapting to change. To conclude, young people are now dominating the technological world and as a result, the older generation is now experiencing less importance. However, youngsters should always respect the elder people and maintain a steady relationship with them for a better society.
Nowadays,
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modernisation
defines how technology can be a powerful tool and this has
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changed
the way
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young
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people
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used
to perceive their position in a society. The younger group is far more motivated by the technological transformation,
thus
giving them the power over the past
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young
generations. This essay will discuss
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some
reasons why this is happening in
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today
's world and how this development impacts their
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relationship
with the elder
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people
.

To
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begin
with, youngsters
are fit
for the jobs that require technological soundness. They tend to be curious about the modern
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changes
,
therefore
they are more likely to adapt to it. Due to this adjustment process, they invest their time learning and applying, to institutions that can provide opportunities for them.
Furthermore
, present
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young
generations are enthusiastic,
thus
they are more observant with the
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changes
on how this transformation
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helps
the society.

Second, they are
physically
fit for the job, since this
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change
result in tons of
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stress
. Numerous studies
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show
that
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today
's individuals can
still
be productive with
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only
four to six hours of sleep. Since they invest more of their time in research and discovering new
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ideas
, then they are more capable of handling bigger responsibilities compared to the previous
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young
generations and present older generation.
Moreover
, past youngsters were more focus on their families and the commitment
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but
this is not the case
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today
. Youngsters are becoming entrepreneurs and using their knowledge to become successful.

On the contrary
, this transformation may create a
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negative
impact on the
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relationship
between the
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old
and
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young
group.
For example
,
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young
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people
may create distant
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relationships
with the older generation, since they know that they are ahead in terms of learning and adapting to
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change
.

To conclude
,
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young
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people
are
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now
dominating the technological world and
as a result
, the older generation is
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now
experiencing less importance.
However
, youngsters should always respect the elder
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people
and maintain a steady
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relationship
with them for a better society.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You have seen an advertisement in your local newspaper for a hotel receptionist Write a letter of application to the hotel manager Write about your experience and qualifications and say why you would like the job Also state when you would be available for v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
326 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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