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You have seen an advertisement in Australian Magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter • Explain why you would like the job? • Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ • Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia. v.1

You have seen an advertisement in Australian Magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter • Explain why you would like the job? • Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ • Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia. v. 1
Dear Sir/ Madam, I am Muaj Khan, I am writing in regards with an advert which I saw in Australian Magazin this morning. I am passionate to do this work. I would like this job for two main reasons. Firstly, I love kids and spending time with them is fun. Let's take my own example, I am actually from grandparent and extended family background where all our uncle and aunt kinds not only live together, but also grow with family values. I have an experience raising cousins from all different ages like 2 to 8 years old. Secondly, I have recently done a First Aid course. I would be the best suitable person for this work as I have always understood the needs of children as well as this I have learned a lot while looking after them. To illustrate, I have been rewarded and appreciated in my current job, which I am doing with an Italian family. I am looking after their two young children aged 5 and 9. Another thing your child will love is my jolly and caring nature, she will enjoy my company. If I get this job, I would love to visit different places, meet new people, and also know their culture which I can do in my free time for sure during my time in Australia. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully,
Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am
Muaj
Khan, I am writing in regards with an advert which I
saw
in Australian
Magazin
this morning. I am passionate to do this work.

I
would like this job for two main reasons.
Firstly
, I
love
kids and spending time with them is fun.
Let
's take my
own
example, I am actually from grandparent and extended family background where all our uncle and aunt kinds not
only
live
together,
but
also
grow with family values. I have an experience raising cousins from all
different
ages like 2 to 8 years
old
.
Secondly
, I have recently done a
First
Aid course.

I would be the best suitable person for this work as I have always understood the needs of children
as well
as this I have learned a lot while looking after them. To illustrate, I have
been rewarded
and appreciated in my
current
job, which I am doing with an Italian family. I am looking after their two young children aged 5 and 9. Another thing your child will
love
is my jolly and caring nature, she will enjoy my
company
.

If I
get
this job, I would
love
to visit
different
places,
meet
new
people
, and
also
know their culture which I can do in my free time for sure during my time in Australia.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay You have seen an advertisement in Australian Magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter • Explain why you would like the job? • Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ • Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia. v. 1

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  American English
7 paragraphs
232 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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