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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six- year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter - Explain why you would like the job - give deta v.2

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six- year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter - Explain why you would like the job - give deta v. 2
It is argued that having friends who share similar mindset with you is beneficial, while some people assume it is advantageous to find friends who does not share the same perspective as you. Even though, a friend with opinions close to us is a great company sometimes we need a buddy who disagrees with us to gives us proper guidance. In this essay both views will be argued followed by a conclusion. On the one hand, having friends with whom you have many similar interests is pleasant. You can always share what you are going through with them during difficult times and be sure that they understand you and support you. In a Harvard business review case, it was indicated that people who have a support group of people with similar view and talk to them during hardships have higher serotonin level. On the other hand, it is beneficial to have buddies who does not always agree with you and have different views toward different subjects. When you have a mate, who is not similar to you, you can learn many different things from them as they look at every matter in a different way than you. Sometimes is life, we need a friend who criticize us and gives you a wake-up call. For instance, when you have a non-smoker friend, she or he can alarm you regarding the harms of smoking rather than having friends who all smoke. In a nutshell, some believe it is good to have friends with alike opinions beside you as a support while other suppose having companions with different views is more beneficial to teach you look at things otherwise.
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share
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similar
mindset with you is beneficial, while
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people
assume it is advantageous to find
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friends
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who
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does
not share the same perspective as you.
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, a
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with opinions close to us is a great
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company
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sometimes
we need a buddy
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who
disagrees with us to gives us proper guidance. In this essay both
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views
will
be argued
followed by a conclusion.

On the one hand,
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with whom you have
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similar
interests is pleasant. You can always share what you are going through with them during difficult times and be sure that they understand you and support you. In a Harvard business review case, it
was indicated
that
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people
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who
have a support group of
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people
with
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and talk to them during hardships have higher serotonin level.

On the other hand
, it is beneficial to have buddies
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not always
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toward
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subjects. When you have a mate,
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is not
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similar
to you, you can learn
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things from them as they look at every matter in a
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way than you.
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life, we need a
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friend
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who
criticize us and gives you a wake-up call.
For instance
, when you have a non-smoker
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friend
, she or he can alarm you regarding the harms of smoking
rather
than
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having
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friends
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who
all smoke.

In a nutshell,
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some
believe it is
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good
to have
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with alike opinions beside you as a support while other suppose
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having
companions with
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different
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views
is more beneficial to teach you look at things
otherwise
.
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33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six- year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter - Explain why you would like the job - give deta v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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