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You have recently used the services of a moving company. At the new place, you found out that some of your items were badly damaged. Write a letter to the company manager including the following: give details of your movelist items that were damagedsay wh v.1

You have recently used the services of a moving company. At the new place, you found out that some of your items were badly damaged. Write a letter to the company manager including the following: give details of your movelist items that were damagedsay wh v. 1
Due to globalization, travelling to foreign countries has been common, following worries about their economy. One of the best ways to alleviate this concern is reinforcing the regulation related to customs. Firstly, One of the main reasons is the concern that international tourism might change their consumption habits. In other words, holidays in exotic places cause people to spend more money than usual and that could last longer than it is supposed to be. Some, for instance, are likely to spend much money to buy overpriced, and useless products that they will not purchase in their daily life. Consequently, the newly formed consumption habits could result in the difficulty of managing income and living. Another reason could be that international trips might lead to economic depression for the domestic business owners. It is true that we have many people maintaining their lives by tourists and their profit would drop if more and more people flow out the home country for tourism. Reinforcing the current regulations is one of the best solutions for both reasons. Most countries limit the total price of products that people can buy in foreign countries and bring to their nations when returning and cost customs if it is exceeded. If the process is strengthened and the limit is decreased, people would contemplate if the items are necessary to purchase and some might travel domestic country more since they do not want to worry about the extra customs, releasing resentment. To conclude, the concern about reforming consumption habits and people running a small business for a living in the national tourism area might cause negative aspects toward international trips. Nevertheless, intensifying the rule related to customs could lead to people spending money reasonably even on vacation travelling the home country more domestic.
Due to globalization, travelling to foreign
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countries
has been common, following worries about their economy. One of the best ways to alleviate this concern is reinforcing the regulation related to customs.

Firstly
, One of the main reasons is the concern that international tourism
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might
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change
their consumption habits.
In other words
, holidays in exotic places cause
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people
to spend more money than usual and that could last longer than it
is supposed
to be.
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Some
,
for instance
, are likely to spend much money to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
overpriced, and useless products that they will not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
in their daily life.
Consequently
, the
newly
formed consumption habits could result in the difficulty of managing income and living.

Another reason could be that international trips
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might
lead to economic depression for the domestic business owners. It is true that we have
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many
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people
maintaining their
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lives
by tourists and their profit would drop if more and more
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people
flow out the home
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country
for tourism.

Reinforcing the
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current
regulations is one of the best solutions for both reasons. Most
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countries
limit the total price of products that
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people
can
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buy
in foreign
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countries
and bring to their nations when returning and cost customs if it
is exceeded
. If the process
is strengthened
and the limit
is decreased
,
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people
would contemplate if the items are necessary to
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purchase
and
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some
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might
travel domestic
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country
more since they do not want to worry about the extra customs, releasing resentment.

To conclude
, the concern about reforming consumption habits and
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people
running a
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small
business for a living in the national tourism area
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might
cause
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negative
aspects toward international trips.
Nevertheless
, intensifying the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rule
related to customs could lead to
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people
spending money
reasonably
even on vacation travelling the home
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country
more domestic.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You have recently used the services of a moving company. At the new place, you found out that some of your items were badly damaged. Write a letter to the company manager including the following: give details of your movelist items that were damagedsay wh v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
295 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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