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These days many of us prefer to throw damaged things away whereas in the past people used to repair damaged items and keep them for a long time Explain why you think this change has happened What are the effects of this change in attitude v.2

These days many of us prefer to throw damaged things away whereas in the past people used to repair damaged items and keep them for a long time Explain why you think this change has happened What are the effects of this change in attitude v. 2
CHILD LABOUR WORK IS CURRENTLY HOTLY DEBATED TOPIC AROUND THE WORD. FEW MASS CONSIDER THIS AS BENEFICAL FOR CHILD GROWTHAND MATURITY. WHEREAS OTHERS OPPOSE THIS NOTION BY SAYING THAT CHILDREN SHOULD ENJOY THEIR CHILDHOOD AND FOCUS ON ACADEMIC STUDIES. FRISTLY, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS ABOUT THE WHY SOME AGAINST THE IDEAS OF OFFSPRING WORK AND SECONDLY, HOW IT WILL MAKE THEM SUCCESSFUL IF THEY HAVE FUNDAMENTAL KNOWLEDGE. LASTLY, STATE MY VIEW IN THE FEVOR OF PEOPLE WHO RIBEL THE BRAINSTROM. FROM MY PIONT OF VIEW, I THINH WE ALLOW JUVENILE TO ENJOY THEI CHILDHOOS RATHER THAN SENDING THEM FOR WORK. ON THE ONE HAND, THE MAJOR REASON FOR NOT ALLOWING JUVENILES FOR WORK IS THAT THEY ARE VERY YOUNGH AND CHILDHOOD IS A STAGE WHERE THEY HAVE MORE ACTIVE BRAIN. IF THEY USE THIS CAPABILITY IN ACADEMIC AREA, THEN DEFINITELY THEY ACHIEVE AS GREAT ECOMPLISHMENTS IN THE FUTURE. MOREOVER, THE JUVENILES ARE NOT MATURE AND STRENGTH ENOUGH TO CARRY THE BURDEN OF THE OCCUPATION. BECAUSE OF THE CONSTANT CHANGE IN THEIR BODY AND BEHAVIOUR. FOR INSTANCE, LABOUR MARKET STUDY IN INDIA SHOWED THAT JUVENILE EMPLOYEES ARE OFTEN DECREASED THE WORK EFFICIENCE AND THIS LEAD TO PROFIT LOSS DUE TO LACK OF UNDERSTANDING OF THE SITUATIONS. ON THE OTHER HAND, WORKING EARLY GIVES A FINANCIAL STABILITY FOR ONESELF AND FAMILY. THUS HE CAN SUPPORT HIS FURTHER STUDIES IF HE OPT TO DO SO. TAKE A YOUNGEST CEO OF THE INDIA AS EXAMPLE, HE SHARED HIS EXPERIENCE AND TOLD THAT HE USED TO WORK AS A FOOD SERVER IN THE MULTINATIONAL COMPANY AND THAT TIME HE WAS ABLE HEAR SOME INFORMATION. HIS THAT OPPORTUITY MADE HIM THE YOUNGEST CEO TODAY. HOWEVER, THIS IS NOT ALWAYS TRUE FOR EVERYONE. THUS, FROM MY PIONT OF VIEW, I THINH WE ALLOW JUVENILE TO ENJOY THEI CHILDHOOS RATHER THAN SENDING THEM FOR WORK. TO SUM UP, OFFSPRINGS DESERVE TO BE LESS RESPONSIBLE AND MATURE AND IT IS GAREFUL IF ONE SPEND IT WISELY. I SUGGEST THAT GOVERNMENT SHOULD IMPLIMENT A LOW TO WHICH EVERYONE SHOULD OBEY TO REDUSE THE CHILD LABOUR ACTIVITIES.
CHILD
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LABOUR
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WORK
IS
CURRENTLY
HOTLY
DEBATED TOPIC AROUND THE WORD. FEW MASS CONSIDER THIS AS
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BENEFICAL
FOR CHILD
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GROWTHAND
MATURITY. WHEREAS OTHERS OPPOSE THIS NOTION BY SAYING THAT CHILDREN SHOULD ENJOY THEIR CHILDHOOD AND FOCUS ON ACADEMIC STUDIES.
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FRISTLY
, THIS ESSAY WILL
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DISCUSS ABOUT THE
WHY
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SOME
AGAINST THE
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IDEAS
OF OFFSPRING
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WORK
AND
SECONDLY
, HOW IT WILL
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MAKE
THEM SUCCESSFUL IF
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THEY
HAVE FUNDAMENTAL KNOWLEDGE.
LASTLY
, STATE MY VIEW IN THE
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FEVOR
OF
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PEOPLE
WHO
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RIBEL
THE
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BRAINSTROM
. FROM MY
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PIONT
OF VIEW, I
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THINH
WE
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ALLOW
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JUVENILE
TO ENJOY
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THEI
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CHILDHOOS
RATHER
THAN SENDING THEM FOR WORK.

ON THE ONE HAND, THE MAJOR REASON FOR NOT ALLOWING
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JUVENILES
FOR
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WORK
IS THAT
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THEY
ARE
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VERY
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YOUNGH
AND CHILDHOOD IS A STAGE WHERE
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THEY
HAVE MORE ACTIVE BRAIN. IF
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THEY
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USE
THIS CAPABILITY IN ACADEMIC AREA, THEN DEFINITELY
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THEY
ACHIEVE AS GREAT
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ECOMPLISHMENTS
IN THE FUTURE.
MOREOVER
, THE
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JUVENILES
ARE NOT MATURE AND STRENGTH
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ENOUGH
TO CARRY THE BURDEN OF THE OCCUPATION.
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BECAUSE
OF THE CONSTANT
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CHANGE
IN THEIR BODY AND
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BEHAVIOUR
.
FOR INSTANCE
,
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LABOUR
MARKET STUDY IN INDIA
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SHOWED
THAT
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JUVENILE
EMPLOYEES ARE
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OFTEN
DECREASED THE
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WORK
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EFFICIENCE
AND THIS LEAD TO PROFIT LOSS DUE TO LACK OF UNDERSTANDING OF THE SITUATIONS.

ON THE OTHER HAND
, WORKING EARLY GIVES A FINANCIAL STABILITY FOR ONESELF AND FAMILY.
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THUS
HE CAN SUPPORT HIS
FURTHER
STUDIES IF HE
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OPT
TO DO
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SO
. TAKE
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A
YOUNGEST CEO OF THE INDIA AS EXAMPLE, HE SHARED HIS EXPERIENCE AND
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TOLD
THAT HE
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USED
TO
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WORK
AS A FOOD SERVER IN THE MULTINATIONAL
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COMPANY
AND THAT TIME HE WAS
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ABLE HEAR
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SOME
INFORMATION. HIS THAT
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OPPORTUITY
MADE HIM THE YOUNGEST CEO
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TODAY
.
HOWEVER
, THIS IS NOT ALWAYS TRUE FOR EVERYONE.

THUS
, FROM MY
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PIONT
OF VIEW, I
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THINH
WE
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ALLOW
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JUVENILE
TO ENJOY
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THEI
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CHILDHOOS
RATHER
THAN SENDING THEM FOR WORK.

TO SUM UP,
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OFFSPRINGS
DESERVE TO BE LESS RESPONSIBLE AND MATURE AND IT IS
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GAREFUL
IF ONE SPEND IT
WISELY
. I SUGGEST THAT
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GOVERNMENT
SHOULD
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IMPLIMENT
A LOW TO WHICH EVERYONE SHOULD OBEY TO
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REDUSE
THE CHILD
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LABOUR
ACTIVITIES.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay These days many of us prefer to throw damaged things away whereas in the past people used to repair damaged items and keep them for a long time Explain why you think this change has happened What are the effects of this change in attitude v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
346 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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