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You have recently been offered a full-time job at a company and you can not continue the course. Write a letter to the course instructor. In the letter: •explain why you cannot continue the course•describe the job you have been offered•and ask if they v.1

You have recently been offered a full-time job at a company and you can not continue the course. Write a letter to the course instructor. In the letter: •explain why you cannot continue the course•describe the job you have been offered•and ask if they v. 1
With the increasing concerns about our planet and climate change, the lives of people in metros and developed cities are affected the most. There is an adverse effect on their lifestyle which also leads to mental distress. In this essay we will discuss the major problems faced by city crowd and how the government can step in and help the alarming situation. It is evident that the lifestyle of humans living in the cities has drastically changed over the years as a result of difficult working hours and advent of basic amenities. In fact, the metro cities have already reported lack of natural resources like ground water, lack of living spaces and the bad quality of air. This has led to bad living habits, for example, irregular sleeping patterns and unhealthy fast food. Moreover, the hectic environment causes stress and other health related problems as well. The government should definitely take steps to improve the livelihood of the people living in cities as the majority of this crowd is working youth and they define the economy of the country. In case, the current condition prevails, the working generation would not be healthy to give their best for the growth of the country. As a first step, the government can encourage companies to establish outside cities which would generate opportunities for citizens. Additionally, providing benefits in land and housing, for working people situated in suburban areas can attract more people. In conclusion, the rising concerns of the working class in the cities is a serious problem. Migrating the crowd to lesser developed cities is the way forward and the government needs to take appropriate steps as this will also lead to the development of suburban areas.
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change
, the
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lives
of
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people
in metros and developed
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cities
are
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affected
the most. There is an adverse effect on their lifestyle which
also
leads to mental distress. In this essay we will discuss the major problems faced by city crowd and how the
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government
can
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step
in and
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help
the alarming situation.

It is evident that the lifestyle of humans
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living
in the
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cities
has
drastically
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changed
over the years
as a result
of difficult
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working
hours and advent of basic amenities. In fact, the metro
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cities
have already reported lack of natural resources like ground water, lack of
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living
spaces and the
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bad
quality of air. This has led to
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bad
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living
habits,
for example
, irregular sleeping patterns and unhealthy
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fast
food.
Moreover
, the hectic environment causes
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stress
and other health related problems
as well
.

The
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government
should definitely take
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steps
to
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improve
the livelihood of the
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people
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living
in
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cities
as the majority of this crowd is
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working
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youth and
they define the economy of the country. In case, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
condition prevails, the
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working
generation would not be healthy to give their best for the growth of the country. As a
first
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step
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
can encourage
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
to establish outside
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
which would generate opportunities for citizens.
Additionally
, providing benefits in land and housing, for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
situated in suburban areas can attract more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

In conclusion
, the rising concerns of the
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working
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class
in the
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cities
is a serious problem. Migrating the crowd to lesser developed
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cities
is the way forward and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
needs to take appropriate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
steps
as this will
also
lead to the development of suburban areas.
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IELTS essay You have recently been offered a full-time job at a company and you can not continue the course. Write a letter to the course instructor. In the letter: •explain why you cannot continue the course•describe the job you have been offered•and ask if they v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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