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These days, people work more than one job, and often change career several times during their life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v.1

These days, people work more than one job, and often change career several times during their life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v. 1
As following up procedure "make sure to put all members of your family on the same page"! Advancement in technology opened doors to various methods of shopping. Shopping online has become one of the primary methods of purchasing goods and services. I totally disagree, with the author's point of view. Buying goods can only take up a few percentages of regular shopping methods, but will not lead to shutting down majority of shops in cities and towns. Raise in access to technology, has given consumers a chance to explore different shopping methods. Shopping online thought popular e-commerce websites became a trend among today's younger generation. Moreover, it has given consumers the benefit to search and purchase products easily. However, this style of shopping has taken away the traditional look and feel for the product consumers used to experience before purchasing it. For instance, the survey conducted by a retail store shows that consumers prefer to demo products like home appliances, perfumes, and other expensive goods before consuming. Easiest way of owning the product is to go to the nearest local store and purchase. Online shopping made product delivery comfortable to your door steps, but the price for delivering, damage and return policies need to be paid by the consumer. On the other hand, shopping at the nearest store will overcome any such problem associated, giving consumer more flexibility to return the product in short span of time and owning a new one. Furthermore, online e-commerce giants are coming up with more and more e-shops in towns and cities to overcome this barrier. In conclusion, online shopping has given the opportunity of finding products and owing them at user's comfort level. Replacing, the idea of the way user looks and feel for the product cannot go away, on top of that the barrier associated with delivery and other policies of online shopping makes it hard for the closing of all shops in town and cities.
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methods
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.
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Shopping
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online
has become one of the primary
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methods
of purchasing
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goods
and services. I
totally
disagree, with the author's point of view. Buying
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goods
can
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only
take up a few percentages of regular
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shopping
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methods
,
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but
will not lead to shutting down majority of shops in cities and towns.

Raise in access to technology, has
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given
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consumers
a chance to explore
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different
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shopping
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methods
.
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Shopping
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online
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thought
popular e-commerce websites became a trend among
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today
's younger generation.
Moreover
, it has
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given
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consumers
the benefit to search and
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purchase
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products
easily
.
However
, this style of
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has taken away the traditional look and feel for the
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product
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consumers
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used
to experience
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before
purchasing it.
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, the survey conducted by a retail store
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shows
that
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consumers
prefer to demo
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products
like home appliances, perfumes, and other expensive
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goods
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before
consuming.

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way of owning the
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product
is to go to the nearest local store and
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purchase
.
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Online
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made
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delivery comfortable to your door steps,
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but
the price for delivering, damage and return policies need to
be paid
by the
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consumer
.
On the other hand
,
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shopping
at the nearest store will overcome any such problem associated, giving
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consumer
more flexibility to return the
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product
in short span of time and owning a new one.
Furthermore
,
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online
e-commerce giants are coming up with more and more e-shops in towns and cities to overcome this barrier.

In conclusion
,
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online
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has
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given
the opportunity of finding
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products
and owing them at user's comfort level. Replacing, the
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idea
of the way user looks and feel for the
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product
cannot go away,
on top of that
the barrier associated with delivery and other policies of
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online
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shopping
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makes
it
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hard
for the closing of all shops in town and cities.
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IELTS essay These days, people work more than one job, and often change career several times during their life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
324 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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