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You have a full time job and you are also doing a part time evening course You now find that you cannot continue the course Write a letter to your teachers In your letter describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action v.1

You have a full time job and you are also doing a part time evening course You now find that you cannot continue the course Write a letter to your teachers In your letter describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action v. 1
Many people believe that students should opt subjects related to science and Technology as it can help with their future, wherein others think that they should choose them as they like. This essay will discuss both views and my opinion stated in this essay. In today's world, science and automation are playing a vital role in our everyday life. As new skill emerges, we aren’t only witnessing improvement in the current option but alongside the advancement it provides. Due to this, many students tend to select their courses which will not only help in their future but also be competitive among others. For instance, technology is used in every profession be it Sports, Banking, Telecommunication and Mass media. On the contrary, Other people believe that the choice of a student should come first, as it would give them a sense of satisfaction. Today, most individuals enjoy in doing what they desire and always make them happy in the course. For instance, a recent survey conducted by the statistics department of University of Bangalore revealed that students with poor grades are forced by their parents into studying what they did not truly desire. Consequently, these students struggle to achieve excellence in the field and lack of studies. Besides, importance of subjects cannot be stressed. Artist for instance, play a key role to comfort people’s eyes, although some individuals see no futuristic importance of the arts. In conclusion, there have been many debates when it comes to pursuing subjects what students prefer. While some argue that students should study course which are important in the future. However, in my opinion students should be allowed to study their choice of course as it only gives them a sense of fulfilment but also creates diversity in the society.
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believe that
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students
should opt subjects related to science and Technology as it can
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help
with their future, wherein others
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think
that they should choose them as they like. This essay will discuss both views and my opinion stated in this essay.

In
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today
's world, science and automation are playing a vital role in our everyday life. As new
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skill
emerges, we aren’t
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only
witnessing improvement in the
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current
option
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but
alongside the advancement it provides. Due to this,
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many
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students
tend to select their
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courses
which will not
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only
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help
in their future
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also
be competitive among others.
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, technology is
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used
in every profession be it Sports, Banking, Telecommunication and Mass media.

On the contrary
, Other
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people
believe that the choice of a
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student
should
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first
, as it would give them a sense of satisfaction.
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Today
, most individuals enjoy in doing what they desire and always
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make
them happy in the
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course
.
For instance
, a recent survey conducted by the statistics department of University of Bangalore revealed that
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students
with poor grades
are forced
by their parents into studying what they did not
truly
desire.
Consequently
, these
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students
struggle to achieve excellence in the field and lack of studies.
Besides
, importance of subjects cannot be
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stressed
. Artist
for instance
, play a key role to comfort
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people
’s eyes, although
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some
individuals
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see
no futuristic importance of the arts.

In conclusion
, there have been
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many
debates when it
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comes
to pursuing subjects what
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students
prefer.
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While
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some
argue that
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students
should study
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course
which are
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important
in the future.
However
, in my opinion
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students
should be
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allowed
to study their choice of
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course
as it
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only
gives them a sense of
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fulfilment
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also
creates diversity in the society.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay You have a full time job and you are also doing a part time evening course You now find that you cannot continue the course Write a letter to your teachers In your letter describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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