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You have a full time job and also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter, -describe the situation-explain why you cannot continue at this time-say what action you w v.1

You have a full time job and also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter, -describe the situation-explain why you cannot continue at this time-say what action you w v. 1
In many parts of the world, businesses are owned and run by families. Its usual contributors include close relatives who handle the resources and finances of an organization. There are some benefits associated with a family business, but there are also some drawbacks associated with undertaking a business venture with the family. With the persistent commitment and involvement of the family members, firms run by families have a greater level of stability and loyalty attached to it. Even during bad times family ties can keep the firm running. The commitment of the family members results in more dedication and flexibility. In other words, members would work together to achieve a common goal irrespective of their qualifications. In fact, most successful business ventures like Walton’s and Ambani’s are also run within the families. On the contrary, one of the most compelling shortcomings of a family business can be conflicts among the partners than can have an unfavourable effect on the business. For instance, the rivalry between husband and wife or siblings can result into the partition of the venture. In addition, the lack of interests among people to join family entrepreneurship leads to apathetic employees. And sometimes the successors of the business are not capable enough to run it due to which the organization suffers. To conclude, there are both supporting and opposing arguments for a family business. Many experts believe that building an organization with family helps keep the family together. With communication and understanding, a dispute in family entrepreneurship can be avoided.
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many
parts of the world,
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businesses
are
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owned
and
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run
by
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families
. Its usual contributors include close relatives who handle the resources and finances of an organization. There are
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some
benefits associated with a
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family
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business
,
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but
there are
also
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some
drawbacks associated with undertaking a
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business
venture with the family.

With the persistent commitment and involvement of the
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family
members, firms
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run
by
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families
have a greater level of stability and loyalty attached to it. Even during
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bad
times
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family
ties can
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keep
the firm running. The commitment of the
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family
members results in more dedication and flexibility.
In other words
, members would work together to achieve a common goal irrespective of their qualifications. In fact, most successful
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business
ventures like Walton’s and
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Ambani
’s are
also
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run
within the families.

On the contrary
, one of the most compelling shortcomings of a
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family
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business
can be conflicts among the partners than can have an
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unfavourable
effect on the
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business
.
For instance
, the rivalry between husband and wife or siblings can result into the partition of the venture.
In addition
, the lack of interests among
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people
to
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join
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family
entrepreneurship leads to apathetic employees. And
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sometimes
the successors of the
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business
are not capable
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enough
to
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run
it due to which the organization suffers.

To conclude
, there are both supporting and opposing arguments for a
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family
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business
.
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Many
experts believe that building an organization with
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family
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helps
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keep
the
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family
together. With communication and understanding, a dispute in
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family
entrepreneurship can
be avoided
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You have a full time job and also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter, -describe the situation-explain why you cannot continue at this time-say what action you w v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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