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You have recently attended a professional course. Write a letter to your manager to thank him/her for the opportunity. In your letter, you should tell: – What it was about? – Explain why it was helpful to you. – Suggest other co-workers who should atte v.1

You have recently attended a professional course. Write a letter to your manager to thank him/her for the opportunity. In your letter, you should tell: – What it was about? – Explain why it was helpful to you. – Suggest other co-workers who should atte v. 1
It is eminent that we humans need to take efforts to restore the nature to its maximum original. In recent times, due to man-made constructions, selfishly killing the flora & fauna around us, most of the animals are getting disrupted from their homes and are on the verge of disappearing. The essay will discuss the significance of safeguarding the natural habitat of animals and how we can achieve the same. In my opinion, it is extremely significant to look after the existing animal species. With increasing human encroachment in the nature’s habitat by disrupting forests to build cities, it’s getting alarming to protect the remaining ones. If we don’t take steps to save the animals now, it will be too late. Loss one species, may trigger the loss of the others depending on it. Thus, by saving the endangered species, we are trying to save none other than ourselves. In order to deal with the issue, we need to take gradual steps towards improving our natural surroundings. Forests are the lungs of the planet. Firstly, we need to preserve forests and wildlife zones as no encroachment zones. No man-made constructions or any time of intervention should be allowed in these particular areas. Secondly, we need awareness amongst individuals so that they help achieve the goal. It is easy to imbibe this awareness in young minds and we can achieve this by adding the importance of environment in their curriculum. If the younger generation is aware, they will make sure that we save our environment and wildlife. For instance, we should ban the usage of items made of animal skin like fur, leather products and so on. This will automatically reduce the demand and will stop animal killings. To sum up, it’s very important to protect the wildlife so that we maintain an ecological balance. We can take several measures to make sure we take care of the animals surrounding us like our own kin.
It is eminent that we humans
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
need
to take efforts to restore the nature to its maximum original. In recent times, due to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
-made constructions,
selfishly
killing the flora & fauna around us, most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
are getting disrupted from their homes and are on the verge of disappearing. The essay will discuss the significance of safeguarding the natural habitat of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
and how we can achieve the same.

In my opinion, it is
extremely
significant to look after the existing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animal
species. With increasing human encroachment in the nature’s habitat by disrupting forests to build cities, it’s getting alarming to protect the remaining ones. If we don’t take steps to save the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
, it will be too late. Loss one species, may trigger the loss of the others depending on it.
Thus
, by saving the endangered species, we are trying to save none other than ourselves.

In order to deal with the issue, we
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
need
to take gradual steps towards improving our natural surroundings. Forests are the lungs of the planet.
Firstly
, we
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
need
to preserve forests and wildlife zones as no encroachment zones. No
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
-made constructions or any time of intervention should be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
in these particular areas.
Secondly
, we
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
need
awareness amongst individuals
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
achieve the goal. It is easy to imbibe this awareness in young
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
minds and
we can achieve this by adding the importance of environment in their curriculum. If the younger generation is aware, they will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure that we save our environment and wildlife.
For instance
, we should ban the usage of items made of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animal
skin like fur, leather products and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on. This will
automatically
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the demand and will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animal
killings.

To sum up, it’s
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to protect the wildlife
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that we maintain an ecological balance. We can take several measures to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure we take care of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
surrounding us like our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
kin.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You have recently attended a professional course. Write a letter to your manager to thank him/her for the opportunity. In your letter, you should tell: – What it was about? – Explain why it was helpful to you. – Suggest other co-workers who should atte v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
324 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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