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You have received a bill from a mobile phone (or cell phone) company for international callcharges relating to a time when you did not use your phone for international calls. Write a letter to the company, complaining about thisgiving your reasonsasking for v.1

You have received a bill from a mobile phone (or cell phone) company for international callcharges relating to a time when you did not use your phone for international calls. Write a letter to the company, complaining about thisgiving your reasonsasking for v. 1
Friendship is good for companionship, it is argued by some that people should have friends who shares the same opinion; however, others believe not all friends should agree with every decision they make. Both sides of the argument will be analysed before a reasoned conclusion will be drawn. On the one hand, having friends who share the same idea will encourage a healthy relationship. This is because there will be less disagreement and confrontations in such relationship. In addition, friend can easily share ideas and opinions. For example, having a friend with the same opinion on a similar topic at school will make it easy to discuss and learn from each other. What's more Is that, trust is gained when you a friend who has the same perception about things with you. This is because one is confident that he or she will not be criticized when they open her to their friends, this notion solidifies a relationship. Therefore; for these reasons, friendship is encouraged amongst like minds On the other hand, although having a friend with a different can cause detachment in a relationship; However, it can be beneficial In the long run. As humans, we cannot always be perfect with our ideas and decisions, having a friend who sometimes criticizes helps to put us in check. For example, when I wanted to stay out late without telling my parents, my friends discouraged me. Although I was not happy with them, but it paid off eventually. This indicates why people should some friends with a different opinion. In conclusion, despite the fact we all need friends who agree with our decision to have a healthy, trustworthy less criticized relationship, I believe it is important for true friends to caution our decisions when it is necessary, this might cause some detachment, but in the long run, the benefit will be known.
Friendship is
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good
for companionship, it
is argued
by
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some
that
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people
should have
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friends
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who
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shares
the same opinion;
however
, others believe not all
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friends
should
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agree
with every
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decision
they
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make
. Both sides of the argument will be
Possible spelling mistake. 'analysed' is British English.
analysed
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before
a reasoned conclusion will
be drawn
.

On the one hand,
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having
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friends
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who
share the same
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idea
will encourage a healthy
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relationship
. This is
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because
there will be less disagreement and confrontations in such
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relationship
.
In addition
,
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friend
can
easily
share
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ideas
and opinions.
For example
,
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having
a
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friend
with the same opinion on a similar topic at school will
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make
it easy to discuss and learn from each other. What's more Is that, trust
is gained
when you a
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friend
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who
has the same perception about things with you. This is
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because
one is confident that he or she will not
be criticized
when they open her to their
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friends
, this notion solidifies a
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relationship
.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Therefore
; for these reasons, friendship
is encouraged
amongst like minds

On the other hand
, although
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having
a
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friend
with a
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different
can cause detachment in a
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relationship
;
However
, it can be beneficial In the long run. As humans, we cannot always be perfect with our
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ideas
and
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decisions
,
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having
a
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friend
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who
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sometimes
criticizes
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helps
to put us in
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check
.
For example
, when I wanted to stay out late without telling my parents, my
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friends
discouraged me. Although I was not happy with them,
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but
it paid off
eventually
. This indicates why
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people
should
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some
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friends
with a
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different
opinion.

In conclusion
, despite the fact we all need
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friends
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who
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agree
with our
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decision
to have a healthy, trustworthy less criticized
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relationship
, I believe it is
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important
for true
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friends
to caution our
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decisions
when it is necessary, this might cause
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
detachment,
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but
in the long run, the benefit will
be known
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You have received a bill from a mobile phone (or cell phone) company for international callcharges relating to a time when you did not use your phone for international calls. Write a letter to the company, complaining about thisgiving your reasonsasking for v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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