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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. Say where you think you left the papers. Explain why they are so importantTell the mana v.1

You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. Say where you think you left the papers. Explain why they are so importantTell the mana v. 1
With the advancement in technology and the introduction of the high speed internet connection, people with extraordinary performances tend to acquire fame easily. While being in camera whether a film star or a sports star, has its own perks and problems. I personally believe that the problems associated do outweigh the benefits as the personal space of an individual is endangered. On one hand, the famous personalities, tend to gather millions of fans. These admirers love them and support them in their good and bad times, which motivates them to perform better and achieve greater heights. To illustrate, Sharukh Khan in an interview once said that, it is the love of his fans, who had made him to work hard and entitled as king of Bollywood. Furthermore, increasing popularity provide them a platform where they act as role models or idols for common people, like, Kapil Dev, who has been an inspiration for many young adults to learn and perform better at cricket. On the other hand, this increasing popularity seems to choke them sometimes. They become public figures who cannot go around and do stuff that mesmerise them, in their own personal space. They always have a fear of getting surrounded by the mob and get smashed in the love of love, so they too keep bodyguards around. Furthermore, unlike common people, their work can become controversies, damaging their personal and professional image. For instance, Kangana Ranaut is entitled as a controversy queen irrespective of her several hits in the entertainment world. They are never alone as camera surrounds and follows them everywhere. The famous actress Ziya Khara died of depression as media disclosed all her personal life in public. To conclude, anyone has right to have his/her personal space and the camera tends to snatch it. Therefore, while becoming a celebrity, an individual attracts more problems than benefits.
With the advancement in technology and the introduction of the high speed internet connection,
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people
with extraordinary performances tend to acquire fame
easily
. While being in camera whether a film star or a sports star, has its
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own
perks and problems. I
personally
believe that the problems associated do outweigh the benefits as the
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personal
space of an individual
is endangered
.

On one hand, the
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famous
personalities, tend to gather millions of fans. These admirers
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love
them and support them in their
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good
and
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bad
times, which motivates them to perform better and achieve greater heights. To illustrate,
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Sharukh
Khan in an interview once said that, it is the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
love
of his fans, who had made him to work
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hard
and entitled as king of Bollywood.
Furthermore
, increasing popularity provide them a platform where they act as role models or idols for common
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people
, like,
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Kapil
Dev, who has been an inspiration for
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many
young adults to learn and perform better at cricket.

On the other hand
, this increasing popularity seems to choke them
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sometimes
. They become public figures who cannot go around and do stuff that
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mesmerise
them, in their
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own
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personal
space. They always have a fear of getting surrounded by the mob and
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get
smashed in the
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love
of
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love
,
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so
they too
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keep
bodyguards around.
Furthermore
, unlike common
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people
, their work can become controversies, damaging their
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personal
and professional image.
For instance
,
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Kangana
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Ranaut
is entitled
as a controversy queen irrespective of her several hits in the entertainment world. They are never alone as camera surrounds and follows them everywhere. The
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famous
actress
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Ziya
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Khara
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died
of depression as media disclosed all her
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
personal
life in public.

To conclude
, anyone has right to have his/her
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
personal
space and the camera tends to snatch it.
Therefore
, while becoming a celebrity, an individual attracts more problems than benefits.
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IELTS essay You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. Say where you think you left the papers. Explain why they are so importantTell the mana v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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