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You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter Correct the information in the article Explain why it is impo v.6

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter Correct the information in the article Explain why it is impo v. 6
Dear sir or madam, I am writing the letter to request to correct some mistakes in your recent released travel magazine which name is “Le voyage”, There are some information relate to my home town is incorrect and misleading. I am a local resident in the city of Chongqing, China, So I get familiar with most of the landmarks and tourist attractions here. In the page 131 of your magazine said “the entrance of the ancient tower HONGYA cave is located at the level 1” but actually it is located at the level 12 because the tower is built along the cliff. From my point of view, It is quite a serious mistake and could misleading the traveller who were first been there. Actually, as a flagship magazine in the tourist industry, Providing accurate and detail information is benefit for you and your company. Therefore, could you please correct the mistake as soon as possible and make an amendment notice in the next public of the magazine. I hope to hear from you soon. Your faithfully Elliot
Dear sir or madam,

I am writing the letter to request to correct
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some
mistakes in your recent released travel magazine which name is “Le voyage”, There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
information relate to my home town is incorrect and misleading.

I am a local resident in the city of Chongqing, China,
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So
I
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get
familiar with most of the landmarks and tourist attractions here. In the page 131 of your magazine said “the entrance of the ancient tower
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HONGYA
cave
is located
at the level 1”
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but
actually it
is located
at the level 12
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because
the tower
is built
along the cliff.

From my point of view, It is quite a serious mistake and could
The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: "mislead"
misleading
the
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traveller
who were
first
been there. Actually, as a flagship magazine in the tourist industry, Providing accurate and detail information is benefit for you and your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

Therefore
, could you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
correct the mistake as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
an amendment notice in the
next
public of the magazine.

I hope to hear from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Your
faithfully


Elliot
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter Correct the information in the article Explain why it is impo v. 6

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
176 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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