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Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - Provide a short update about your life since you saw him/her last - Explain why you will be traveling to his/her city- Say what you would like to do when you visit his/her city v.4

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - Provide a short update about your life since you saw him/her last - Explain why you will be traveling to his/her city- Say what you would like to do when you visit his/her city v. 4
It is a wish of everyone to live a free and happy life in a country where they get equal opportunity and thereby secure a better future. A rising number of individuals move from one nation to another, every year, for a variety of reasons. This essay will discuss both the positive and negative aspects migration has on the people and society. Migration brings in a lot of benefits for the individual and the community as a whole. Firstly, it opens up better job opportunities for the people, which are high-paying and more secure. Society in turn gets highly qualified persons, such as doctors and scientists, to run their institutes. For example, 20 percent of medical graduates from India move to the US for their post-graduation residency. Therefore, improved employment chances and skilled persons to run the business are the advantages of moving. Despite the positives, there are potential drawbacks of moving from one nation to another. Individuals leave everything behind, their families and children, in search for a better lifestyle. They don’t meet their parents and other loved ones for years. This also makes the receiving nation crowded and polluted, that is, increasing the number of people in a particular area produces more waste and load on the transport system. To illustrate, you will hardly find a place to sit in the New York City’s subway. In conclusion, a variety of reasons make large numbers of people move from one country to another. This essay discussed the positive aspects of migration, including better work options for the individuals and community gets highly talented individuals to run their institutes. It also debated the disadvantages, including living away from families and pollution.
It is a wish of everyone to
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live
a free and happy life in a country where they
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get
equal opportunity and thereby secure a
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better
future. A rising number of
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individuals
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move
from one nation to another, every year, for a variety of reasons. This essay will discuss both the
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positive
and
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negative
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aspects
migration has on the
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people
and society.

Migration brings in
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a lot of
benefits for the
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individual
and the community as a whole.
Firstly
, it opens up
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better
job opportunities for the
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people
, which are high-paying and more secure. Society in turn
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gets
highly
qualified persons, such as doctors and scientists, to run their institutes.
For example
, 20 percent of medical graduates from India
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move
to the US for their post-graduation residency.
Therefore
,
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improved
employment chances and skilled persons to run the business are the advantages of moving.

Despite the positives, there are potential drawbacks of moving from one nation to another.
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Individuals
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leave
everything behind, their families and children, in search for a
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better
lifestyle. They don’t
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meet
their parents and other
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loved
ones for years. This
also
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makes
the receiving nation crowded and polluted,
that is
, increasing the number of
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people
in a particular area produces more waste and load on the transport system. To illustrate, you will hardly find a place to sit in the New York City’s subway.

In conclusion
, a variety of reasons
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make
large numbers of
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people
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move
from one country to another. This essay discussed the
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positive
aspects of migration, including
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better
work options for the
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individuals
and community
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gets
highly
talented
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individuals
to run their institutes. It
also
debated the disadvantages, including living away from families and pollution.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
If we spoke a different language, we would perceive a somewhat different world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - Provide a short update about your life since you saw him/her last - Explain why you will be traveling to his/her city- Say what you would like to do when you visit his/her city v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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