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You have heard and develop plans to build a shopping center near your house, write a letter to conceal, say how you heard about the plan, explain how you feel about it, ask for more information about it. v.1

You have heard and develop plans to build a shopping center near your house, write a letter to conceal, say how you heard about the plan, explain how you feel about it, ask for more information about it. v. 1
According to some people, the number of boys and girls admitted to any course should be the same. In other words, half of the seats should be reserved for male candidates and half should be reserved for female candidates. I do not agree with this view. In my opinion, merit, and not gender, should be the criterion for entrance into university programmes. The argument that Having the same number of men and women on all degree courses is simply unrealistic. To start with, it shows utter disregard for merit. If seats are reserved based on gender-specific, many meritorious students will fail to get the entry in the collage. Universities should select best students that are qualified enough for the subject based on their talent and performances, not on their sex. Therefore, both men and women can have opportunities to achieve their goals as they know that their success in school is based on good performances. Another argument against reserving seats on the basis of gender is the difference in the aptitude of men and women. Certain courses like nursing, home science or teaching are more popular among the girls. Likewise, certain courses like engineering and mechanics are more popular among boys. If half of the seats are reserved for boys in a nursing course, chances are many seats will lie vacant. At the same time, many meritorious girls will fail to get admission. Even in courses where both boys and girls have the same aptitude, this arrangement will prevent many deserving candidates from gaining admission just because they belong to the other gender. In conclusion, university education is important for both male and female, but admitting them in equal proportion is out of question practically as well as socially.
According to
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some
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people
, the number of
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boys
and
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girls
admitted to any
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course
should be the same.
In other words
, half of the
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seats
should be
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reserved
for male candidates and half should be
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reserved
for female candidates. I do not
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agree
with this view. In my opinion, merit, and not gender, should be the criterion for entrance into university
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programmes
.

The argument that Having the same number of
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men
and women on all degree
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courses
is
simply
unrealistic. To
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start
with, it
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shows
utter disregard for merit. If
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seats
are
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reserved
based on gender-specific,
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many
meritorious students will fail to
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get
the entry in the collage. Universities should select best students that
are qualified
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enough
for the subject based on their talent and performances, not on their sex.
Therefore
, both
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men
and women can have opportunities to achieve their goals as they know that their success in school
is based
on
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good
performances.

Another argument against reserving
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seats
on the basis of gender is the difference in the aptitude of
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men
and women. Certain
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courses
like nursing, home science or teaching are more popular among the
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girls
.
Likewise
, certain
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courses
like engineering and mechanics are more popular among
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boys
. If half of the
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seats
are
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reserved
for
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boys
in a nursing
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course
, chances are
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many
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seats
will lie vacant. At the same time,
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many
meritorious
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girls
will fail to
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get
admission. Even in
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courses
where both
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boys
and
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girls
have the same aptitude, this arrangement will
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prevent
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many
deserving candidates from gaining admission
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just
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because
they belong to the other gender.

In conclusion
, university education is
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important
for both male and female,
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but
admitting them in equal proportion is out of question
practically
as well
as
socially
.
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IELTS essay You have heard and develop plans to build a shopping center near your house, write a letter to conceal, say how you heard about the plan, explain how you feel about it, ask for more information about it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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