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You have finished a course. Write a letter to the course organizer to give yourfeedback. In your letter include: ▪the details of the course▪what you enjoyed during the course▪any suggestions you would haveWrite at least 150 words. v.1

You have finished a course. Write a letter to the course organizer to give yourfeedback. In your letter include: ▪the details of the course▪what you enjoyed during the course▪any suggestions you would have v. 1
Practical skills are of the utmost importance to students, yet it is argued by many people that schools and universities seldom teach them and instead focus on theories. I completely agree with this as students are rarely exposed to any practical knowledge throughout their education. Teachers and professors have very little knowledge of the practical skills that should be taught to students. They have spent their whole lives in the academic field teaching facts and have no experience of the required skills in the workplace. Take, for example, professors who teach software engineering subjects to university students. They have never worked in IT companies or had prior experience in designing real-life applications. All they can do is explain theoretical knowledge to students without demonstrating anything. In this case, students will graduate without the practical skills required to work and they might struggle and spend months taking courses after their graduation in order to work in an IT company. Another point is the pressure put on students during their school and university years. They are supposed to attend classes, do their homework and study for exams to obtain high grades. They are evaluated based on their grades and not on their knowledge in their own field. In other words, too much attention is given to collecting grades and too little to the actual knowledge and outcome. Furthermore, universities do not contain suitable training programs that can prepare students for the workplace and enhance their experience, soft skills and other qualities they would need to succeed at work. For instance, there is no focus on training programs that familiarize students with the workplace. To conclude, there is a huge gap between education and workplace requirements. This gap is mainly caused by the lack of practical skills taught to students and the ignorance of its existence by teachers and pedagogical experts.
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students
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universities
seldom teach them and
instead
focus on theories. I completely
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agree
with this as
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students
are rarely exposed to any
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practical
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knowledge
throughout their education.

Teachers and professors have
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very
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little
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knowledge
of the
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practical
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skills
that should
be taught
to
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students
. They have spent their whole
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lives
in the academic field teaching facts and have no experience of the required
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skills
in the workplace. Take,
for example
, professors who teach software engineering subjects to
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university
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students
. They have never worked in IT
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companies
or had prior experience in designing real-life applications. All they can do is
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explain
theoretical
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knowledge
to
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students
without demonstrating anything.
In this case
,
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students
will graduate without the
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practical
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skills
required to
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work and
they might struggle and spend months taking courses after their graduation in order to work in an IT
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company
.

Another point is the pressure put on
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students
during their school and
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university
years. They
are supposed
to attend classes, do their homework and study for exams to obtain high grades. They
are evaluated
based on their grades and not on their
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knowledge
in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
field.
In other words
, too much attention is
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given
to collecting grades and too
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little
to the actual
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knowledge
and outcome.
Furthermore
,
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universities
do not contain suitable training programs that can prepare
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students
for the workplace and enhance their experience, soft
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skills
and other qualities they would need to succeed at work.
For instance
, there is no focus on training programs that familiarize
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students
with the workplace.

To conclude
, there is a huge gap between education and workplace requirements. This gap is
mainly
caused by the lack of
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practical
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skills
taught to
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students
and the ignorance of its existence by teachers and pedagogical experts.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You have finished a course. Write a letter to the course organizer to give yourfeedback. In your letter include: ▪the details of the course▪what you enjoyed during the course▪any suggestions you would have v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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