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write a letter to an organizer about the hotel you stayed who booked the hotel for youmeeting detailsWhat you did not like about the hotelwhat you want organizer to do v.1

write a letter to an organizer about the hotel you stayed who booked the hotel for youmeeting detailsWhat you did not like about the hotelwhat you want organizer to do v. 1
There will be so many crime movies and criminal television shows are released every year. Because, many of the people like this stream and make the films hit. In my opinion, only few people influenced by the cinema. I am going to discuss about this in detail in the below section. First, the most popular and revenue generated genre is crime. Trends are showing that the highest number of movies and TV shows, releasing was related to crime. Because audience more fascinated about these kind of films. For instance, Breaking Bad TV show was a fabulous hit on the small screen. This show was released in the year of 2000. Since then, people have been watching continuously across the world. There were many other cinemas and TV shows are being streamed and became successful. Second, there are many pros and cons in regards to these types of shows. Since many of the shows are being filmed in this type of genre every year, it will generate enormous revenue. More revenue means more employment. Many families are receiving bread and butter, due to these kind of shows. In addition to this, people are also getting entertainment. Other side, few teenagers are affected by crime shows and breaching the law, however this impact was minimal. To conclude, every kind of movies and shows are having a positive and negative side. It is all depending on the humans. People ought to consider movies and shows are only entertainment purpose and not for any illegal activities.
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so
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many
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crime
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movies
and criminal television
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shows
are released
every year.
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Because
,
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many
of the
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people
like this stream and
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make
the films hit. In my opinion,
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only
few
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people
influenced by the cinema. I am going to
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discuss about this
in detail in the below section.

First
, the most popular and revenue generated genre is
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crime
. Trends are showing that the highest number of
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movies
and TV
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shows
, releasing
was related
to
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crime
.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
audience more fascinated about
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these kind
of films.
For instance
, Breaking
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Bad
TV
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show
was a fabulous hit on the
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small
screen. This
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show
was released
in the year of 2000. Since then,
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people
have been watching
continuously
across the world. There were
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many
other cinemas and TV
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shows
are
being streamed
and became successful.

Second, there are
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many
pros and cons
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in regards to
these types of
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shows
. Since
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many
of the
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shows
are
being filmed
in this type of genre every year, it will generate enormous revenue. More revenue means more employment.
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Many
families are receiving bread and butter, due to
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these kind
of
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shows
.
In addition
to this,
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people
are
also
getting entertainment. Other side, few
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teenagers
are
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affected
by
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crime
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shows
and breaching the law,
however
this impact was minimal.

To conclude
, every kind of
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movies
and
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shows
are having a
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positive
and
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negative
side. It is all depending on the humans.
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People
ought to consider
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movies
and
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shows
are
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only
entertainment purpose and not for any illegal activities.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay write a letter to an organizer about the hotel you stayed who booked the hotel for youmeeting detailsWhat you did not like about the hotelwhat you want organizer to do v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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