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Write a letter to a friend to ask for his/her help to collect money for a charity organization. The letter needs to cover the following details. - why do you want to collect money for the charity organization? - Ask your friend to help- explain in detail ho v.1

Write a letter to a friend to ask for his/her help to collect money for a charity organization. The letter needs to cover the following details. - why do you want to collect money for the charity organization? - Ask your friend to help- explain in detail ho v. 1
Communication has shaped our world throughout the history by exchange of thoughts, culture, food and products. And with the advent of digital communication through the internet, the process has revolutionized such interactions between people through emails, social media and instant messaging. I strongly agree with the statement and in this essay I will highlight my opinion with examples. Firstly, digital communication has helped the world come closer. People from any part of the world can share their thoughts on social media or emails, therefore having an impact on the way we think about others. For example, the plight of ethnic groups across South Western part of China came to light from a small email from a human rights activist. Consequently, the strong view of the country for being the second largest economy quickly changed and the atrocities are now being shared and highlighted on all social media forums. In other words, people can now discuss and share their thoughts that influence millions through the internet and often leads to mass movements. Secondly, it has helped improve businesses across the globe. Emails, Whatsapp and Twitter, nowadays have become official way of communication for many firms. For example, about 30 percent of the customer complaints were swiftly handled by Airtel through their Twitter account, while about 50 percent of complaints were catered through emails. Such ways of interactions not only make the customers feel empowered, but also help many companies to improve their services. Consequently, mass communication through various apps and emails has changed the way people do business, thus making it more transparent. In conclusion, digital communications has positively changed the way we feel and think of the world. In other words, communication has now become a tool that makes people feel stronger and completed.
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Communication
has shaped our
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world
throughout the history by exchange of thoughts, culture, food and products. And with the advent of digital
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communication
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through
the internet, the process has revolutionized such interactions between
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people
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through
emails, social media and instant messaging. I
strongly
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agree
with the statement and in this essay I will highlight my opinion with examples.

Firstly
, digital
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communication
has
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helped
the
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world
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come
closer.
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People
from any part of the
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world
can share their thoughts on social media or emails,
therefore
having an impact on the way we
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think
about others.
For example
, the plight of ethnic groups across South Western part of China came to light from a
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small
email from a human rights activist.
Consequently
, the strong view of the country for being the second largest economy
quickly
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changed
and the atrocities are
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now
being shared
and highlighted on all social media forums.
In other words
,
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people
can
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now
discuss and share their thoughts that influence millions
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through
the internet and
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often
leads to mass movements.

Secondly
, it has
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helped
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improve
businesses across the globe. Emails,
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Whatsapp
and Twitter, nowadays have become official way of
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communication
for
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many
firms.
For example
, about 30 percent of the customer complaints were
swiftly
handled by Airtel
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through
their Twitter account, while about 50 percent of complaints
were catered
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through
emails. Such ways of interactions not
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only
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make
the customers feel empowered,
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also
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help
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companies
to
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improve
their services.
Consequently
, mass
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communication
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through
various apps and emails has
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changed
the way
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people
do business,
thus
making it more transparent.

In conclusion
, digital communications has
positively
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changed
the way we feel and
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think
of the
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world
.
In other words
,
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communication
has
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now
become a tool that
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makes
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people
feel stronger and completed.
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IELTS essay Write a letter to a friend to ask for his/her help to collect money for a charity organization. The letter needs to cover the following details. - why do you want to collect money for the charity organization? - Ask your friend to help- explain in detail ho v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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