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you have been seen an advertiement looking for volunteer to teach english overseas write to recuitment officer tell them where you saw advertisement explain why you would like to go describe the skills that you have that you think wpuld help v. 1
The last few decades witnessed a significant development in the information technology. As a result; the internet has become an essential part of human life. Hence, some argue that it is one of the basic needs of people in today's world. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this point of view due to certain factors, which will discuss in this essay. To begin with, because of the rapid development of the world, most individuals nowadays have a very hectic lifestyle, the information technology is helping people to balance their lives. In order to cope with the demands of the occupation employees have to spend extended hours in their workplaces. Therefore, they do not have the chance to engage with the daily household responsibilities such as bill payments. Fortunately, online payment methods have made the lives of people easier by allowing them to complete those tasks via the internet. Hence, if a person does not use the internet, it would be quite difficult to face the challenging lifestyle of the 21st century. Moreover, the social media play a crucial part in the modern society, if an individual is refusing to use the internet, he or she might be left out from the rest of the community. Almost everyone uses these websites to get in touch with friends and family. There are groups formed with students from same universities and employees from the same organization. If a person is not part of these online communities more often than not he or she is going to be rejected from the rest of the society. A recent survey has found that a large portion of people who do use social media ended up being lonely in their lives. In conclusion, the internet has become a part of every aspect of our lives. It is being used for everyday activities as well as to be socializing with friends. Hence, it is quite challenging to live without it in this modern world.
The last few decades witnessed a significant development in the information technology.
As a result
; the internet has become an essential
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part
of human life.
Hence
,
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some
argue that it is one of the basic needs of
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people
in
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today
's world. In my opinion, I
strongly
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agree
with this point of view due to certain factors, which will discuss in this essay.

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begin
with,
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because
of the rapid development of the world, most individuals nowadays have a
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very
hectic lifestyle, the information technology is helping
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people
to balance their
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lives
. In order to cope with the demands of the occupation employees
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have to
spend extended hours in their workplaces.
Therefore
, they do not have the chance to engage with the daily household responsibilities such as bill payments.
Fortunately
, online payment methods have made the
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lives
of
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people
easier by allowing them to complete those tasks via the internet.
Hence
, if a person does not
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use
the internet, it would be quite difficult to face the challenging lifestyle of the 21st century.

Moreover
, the social media play a crucial
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part
in the modern society, if an individual is refusing to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the internet, he or she might be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
out from the rest of the community. Almost everyone
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uses
these websites to
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get
in touch with friends and family. There are groups formed with students from same universities and employees from the same organization. If a person is not
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part
of these online communities more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
than not he or she is going to
be rejected
from the rest of the society. A recent survey has found that a large portion of
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people
who do
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
social media ended up being lonely in their
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lives
.

In conclusion
, the internet has become a
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part
of every aspect of our
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lives
. It is being
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used
for everyday activities
as well
as to be socializing with friends.
Hence
, it is quite challenging to
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live
without it in this modern world.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay you have been seen an advertiement looking for volunteer to teach english overseas write to recuitment officer tell them where you saw advertisement explain why you would like to go describe the skills that you have that you think wpuld help v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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