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Many foods are shippped from far away SOme people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically Do you think the advantages out weigh its disadvantages v.1

Many foods are shippped from far away SOme people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically Do you think the advantages out weigh its disadvantages v. 1
Mankind has literally entered into the digital era because of the technical advancements in the IT sector in the past two decades. Some people believe that the future inventions might have a negative impact on the society rather than a positive one. I strongly disagree with this idea, in my opinion the advantages of the technical development weigh far more than the disadvantages. IT sector inventions like the World Wide Web, emails, Skype and Whatsapp completely took over the conventional communication methods which were used earlier. Talking to someone who is very distant has become much easier and cost effective these days compared to the past. One can easily contact their friends or loved ones anywhere in the world with a push of a button on their mobile phone or on a computer. Hologram invention is considered to be one the most futuristic and cutting edge technology. Many researches are going on to develop this technology and implement it in various activities, for example use of this technology in telecom industry can result in a revolutionary change in the normal methods of communication these days. It can add the human touch to the conversation by making it a face to face confrontation. Development in the IT field has completely changed the workplace scenario. Addition of computers and digitalisation of offices has replaced the traditional paper based working making one’s life convenient and hassle free. Digitalisation not only proved to be eco-friendly by reducing the wastage of paper, but also helps in proper maintenance of long term records. For example, digitalisation of all Government schemes and maintenance of all financial records can be very helpful to the society as the data can be easily available to the common man, hence leading to corruption free governance. In conclusion, IT sector advancement has brought numerous benefits and made mankind's life easier and comfortable in many ways thus proving its negative impact negligible when compared to the positive one on the society.
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literally
entered into the digital era
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because
of the technical advancements in the IT sector in the past two decades.
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Some
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people
believe that the future inventions might have a
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negative
impact on the society
rather
than a
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positive
one. I
strongly
disagree with this
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idea
, in my opinion the advantages of the technical development weigh far more than the disadvantages.

IT sector inventions like the World Wide Web, emails, Skype and
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Whatsapp
completely took over the conventional communication methods which were
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used
earlier. Talking to someone who is
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very
distant has become much easier and cost effective these days compared to the past. One can
easily
contact their friends or
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loved
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ones
anywhere in the world with a push of a button on their mobile phone or on a computer. Hologram invention
is considered
to be
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one
the most futuristic and cutting edge technology.
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Many
researches are going on to develop this technology and implement it in various activities,
for example
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use
of this technology in telecom industry can result in a revolutionary
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change
in the normal methods of communication these days. It can
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add
the human touch to the conversation by making it a face to face confrontation.

Development in the IT field has completely
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changed
the workplace scenario. Addition of computers and
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digitalisation
of offices has replaced the traditional paper based working making one’s life convenient and hassle free.
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Digitalisation
not
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only
proved to be eco-friendly by reducing the wastage of paper,
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but
also
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helps
in proper maintenance of long term records.
For example
,
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digitalisation
of all
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Government
schemes and maintenance of all financial records can be
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very
helpful to the society as the data can be
easily
available to the common
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man
,
hence
leading to corruption free governance.

In conclusion
, IT sector advancement has brought numerous benefits and made mankind's life easier and comfortable in
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many
ways
thus
proving its
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negative
impact negligible when compared to the
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positive
one on the society.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many foods are shippped from far away SOme people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically Do you think the advantages out weigh its disadvantages v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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Task Achievement: 7.5
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