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You are planning a short visit to a city where your relatives lives explain when and how long you will be in town ask whether you can stay at their home offer to pay for yourself v.1

You are planning a short visit to a city where your relatives lives explain when and how long you will be in town ask whether you can stay at their home offer to pay for yourself v. 1
Construction and manufacturing are considered as booming industries today in developing nations. Also, along with this rapid growth, air and water pollution is increasing in speed. However, this could be controlled by opting efficient technology and methods and implementing strict rules. Most of the manufacturing industries are near to the pond or lake where a water source is available. This is because they can dispose waste into the water. As a result of which, water is polluted and people living in surrounding area cannot use it. Not only people, but it also affects the flora and fauna. Apart from this, harmful chemicals which are released decreases the quality of the air. As a preventive measure, the manufacturers can install modern machines which are environment friendly. Secondly, they can recycle the waste before disposing it. Furthermore, construction sites cause a lot of air pollution by land clearing, demolishing, burning and working with toxic materials. Apart from this, every construction project result in the gas emissions such as carbon dioxide, methane and other waste products which can be the cause for global warming. So to have a less impact on the environment, government can implement strict rules which also includes regular inspections of the sites. For instance, The UK Environment Agency and other government bodies are putting increasing pressure on construction companies to reduce pollution and conform to environmental regulations. In addition, the government can have a fine system if the rules are not followed. To sum up, construction and other industries play a vital role in developing countries, but they are responsible too for air and water pollution which has a bad impact on the environment. However, preventive measures such as using modern machines or technology, recycling waste and enforcing strict rules can be taken in order to decrease pollution and to save nature.
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Construction
and manufacturing
are considered
as booming industries
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today
in developing nations.
Also
, along with this rapid growth,
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air
and
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water
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pollution
is increasing in speed.
However
, this could
be controlled
by opting efficient technology and methods and implementing strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
.

Most of the manufacturing industries are near to the pond or lake where a
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water
source is available. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they can dispose
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waste
into the
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water
.
As a result
of which,
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water
is polluted
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
living in surrounding area cannot
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use
it. Not
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only
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people
,
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but
it
also
affects the flora and fauna. Apart from this, harmful chemicals which
are released
decreases the quality of the
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air
. As a preventive measure, the manufacturers can install modern machines which are
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environment
friendly.
Secondly
, they can recycle the
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waste
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
disposing it.

Furthermore
,
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construction
sites cause
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
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air
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
by land clearing, demolishing, burning and working with toxic materials. Apart from this, every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
construction
project result in the gas emissions such as carbon dioxide, methane and other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
products which can be the cause for global warming.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
to have a less impact on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can implement strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
which
also
includes regular inspections of the sites.
For instance
, The UK
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Environment
Agency and other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
bodies are putting increasing pressure on
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construction
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
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pollution
and conform to environmental regulations.
In addition
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can have a fine system if the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
are not followed.

To sum up,
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construction
and other industries play a vital role in
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developing countries
,
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but
they are responsible too for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
which has a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
impact on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
.
However
, preventive measures such as using modern machines or technology, recycling
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
and enforcing strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
can
be taken
in order to decrease
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
and to save nature.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You are planning a short visit to a city where your relatives lives explain when and how long you will be in town ask whether you can stay at their home offer to pay for yourself v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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