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some business find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills what are causes suggest possible solutions v.1

some business find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills what are causes suggest possible solutions v. 1
It is very clear that the need for food is on the rise across the globe. This essay will explore two of the problems which have resulted from these global changes and propose measures which might address them. With regards to a rise in food requirements, one of the most significant dangers is likely to be numerously increasing population. Whereas in the past the demand and supply were often balanced, nowadays, due to a striking increase in inhabitants which may result in the shortage of provision. For instance, most populous countries like Africa have a huge drop in demand and supply percentage. To tackle this problem, international governing bodies should introduce advanced farming and precision techniques to scale up the productivity. This should result in a fair amount of victual production, in turn meeting the needs of citizens. Turning to the global insufficiency, the most pressing problems is a change in the climatic conditions. This is because drastic variations in the weather such as inadequate rains, global warming are impacting the cultivation. Consequently, the food generation may be reduced, affecting the quality and quantity. For example, countries located closer to the equator are prone to harsh temperatures with limited water resources, thus leading to less farming. This problem could be mitigated by global communities, educating farmers regarding the seasonal crops and crops that could yield more with minimal assets. In doing so, the enough amount of nourishment deposits could be generated. In conclusion, two of the most significant risks that food demand has created are the increased people and change in atmosphere. However, these problems should be minimized if the regulating authorities educate farmers in advance farming, precision techniques, and seasonal crops.
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clear
that the need for
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food
is on the rise across the globe. This essay will explore two of the
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problems
which have resulted from these
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global
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changes
and propose measures which might address them.

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a rise in
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food
requirements, one of the most significant
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dangers
is likely to be
numerously
increasing population. Whereas in the past the demand and supply were
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often
balanced, nowadays, due to a striking increase in inhabitants which may result in the shortage of provision.
For instance
, most populous countries like Africa have a huge drop in demand and supply percentage. To tackle this
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problem
, international governing bodies should introduce advanced farming and precision techniques to scale up the productivity. This should result in a
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fair
amount of victual production, in turn meeting the needs of citizens.

Turning to the
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global
insufficiency, the most pressing
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problems
is a
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change
in the climatic conditions. This is
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because
drastic variations in the weather such as inadequate rains,
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global
warming are impacting the cultivation.
Consequently
, the
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food
generation may be
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reduced
, affecting the quality and quantity.
For example
, countries located closer to the equator are prone to harsh temperatures with limited water resources,
thus
leading to less farming.

This
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problem
could
be mitigated
by
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global
communities, educating farmers regarding the seasonal crops and crops that could yield more with minimal assets. In doing
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so
, the
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enough
amount of nourishment deposits could
be generated
.

In conclusion
, two of the most significant
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risks
that
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food
demand has created are the increased
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people
and
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change
in atmosphere.
However
, these
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problems
should
be minimized
if the regulating authorities educate farmers in advance farming, precision techniques, and seasonal crops.
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IELTS essay some business find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills what are causes suggest possible solutions v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
282 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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