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You have been offered a job, asking you to start next week. You want the job very much but, because of a previous commitment, you want to delay the start for another two weeks. Write to the Manager, accepting the job, but explaining your situation and aski v.1

You have been offered a job, asking you to start next week. You want the job very much but, because of a previous commitment, you want to delay the start for another two weeks. Write to the Manager, accepting the job, but explaining your situation and aski v. 1
Holding business meetings and training via the internet has gained enormous popularity in recent years. Although the drawbacks of this are varied, in my opinion, the benefits are greater. On the one hand, conducting meetings and training sessions online may have some major disadvantages. The first drawback is the technical limitations that participants may have, which may reduce the effectiveness of discussions or meetings. For example, the elderly may find it hard to understand and make use of the latest programs and software. In additional, the signal of internet devices may be interrupted at any time which cause by unexpected reasons. As a result, it wastes time and energy of people then become an ineffective meetings or trainings. The second disadvantage is the lack of face-to-face interaction which is often considered as the key to a successful meeting or training session. There would be some misunderstandings between people due to the indirect meeting. However, I am convinced that the advantages of virtual meetings are more significant. Compared to traditional face-to-face meetings, those held online consumes much less time and money. In the past, attendants had to make long trips just to meet with other employees from other branches, however with online meetings, all team members can join the conference from any place, without the need to travel. Another advantage of online communication is that members who join meetings and training can share and organise files and presentations easily and conveniently. The files can also be edited or revised by other members, facilitating collaboration within the whole team. In conclusion, it seems that the merits of virtual meetings and trainings are more significant than the downsides.
Holding business
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meetings
and
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training
via the internet has gained enormous popularity in recent years. Although the drawbacks of this
are varied
, in my opinion, the benefits are greater.

On the one hand, conducting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meetings
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
sessions
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online
may have
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some
major disadvantages. The
first
drawback is the technical limitations that participants may have, which may
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reduce
the
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effectiveness
of discussions or
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meetings
.
For example
, the elderly may find it
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hard
to understand and
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make
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use
of the latest programs and software. In additional, the signal of internet devices may
be interrupted
at any time which cause by unexpected reasons.
As a result
, it wastes time and energy of
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people
then become an ineffective
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meetings
or
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trainings
. The second disadvantage is the lack of face-to-face interaction which is
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often
considered as the key to a successful
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meeting
or
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training
session. There would be
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some
misunderstandings between
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people
due to the indirect meeting.

However
, I
am convinced
that the advantages of virtual
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meetings
are more significant. Compared to traditional face-to-face
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meetings
, those held
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online
consumes much less time and money. In the past, attendants had to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
long trips
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just
to
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meet
with other employees from other branches,
however
with
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online
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meetings
, all team members can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the conference from any place, without the need to travel. Another advantage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
communication is that members who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
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meetings
and
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training
can share and
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organise
files and presentations
easily
and
conveniently
. The files can
also
be edited
or revised by other members, facilitating collaboration within the whole team.

In conclusion
, it seems that the merits of virtual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meetings
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trainings
are more significant than the downsides.
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IELTS essay You have been offered a job, asking you to start next week. You want the job very much but, because of a previous commitment, you want to delay the start for another two weeks. Write to the Manager, accepting the job, but explaining your situation and aski v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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