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25/09/2017You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer, in your letterExplain your situationDescribe your problemsTell him when you think you can start. v.1

25/09/2017You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer, in your letterExplain your situationDescribe your problemsTell him when you think you can start. v. 1
One question that has caused a great deal of controversy over the year is animal testing. While many people have suggested that the research on animal should be maintained due to the advantages which they brings to us, I am, however, not sure that this is necessary the case. Some people believe that animal testings are good because it gives the number of benefits and one of the strongest advantages is to study the effect of genetic disease. Indeed, thanks to the experiment on animal, researchers can find out how genes work because the genes of animals such as rat or monkey are similar to people and then, they can advance in the understanding of genetics in human. This leads to investigate treatments for human disease which relate to genetic traits more quickly. However, it might be unsuitable in the modern life because testing on animal are dangerous and inhuman. In fact, scientist can not totally sure that the result in animal experiment can give the same effect as people due to the difference in cell structure between animals and humans. Additionally, this investigation causes suffering to animals, so, it is too cruel to test. Besides, I am firmly on the opinion that people should not use animal as a form of experiment for new medicines because it is so wasteful and people have other ways to check the safety of drugs. The first of these is the effect of animal testing on the economy. To illustrate, each year, many countries can cost a hundred million dollars to research new treatments based on animal experiment, however, only few medicines are tested successfully. This leads to squander a huge amount of money which can be used for other social purposes instead of investigating for animal. Moreover, thanks to the effective innovations in science and technology, investigators find new methods to test the level of safety for productions. In fact, nowadays, many countries have tend to conduct vitro method which uses human cell and tissues to endorse new drugs as an alternative test for animal testing. In conclusion, It would be a mistake to carry out animal investigation to find the new medicines and I believe that this issue should be banned
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good
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it gives the number of benefits and one of the strongest advantages is to study the effect of genetic disease.
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experiment
on
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animal
, researchers can find out how genes work
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because
the genes of
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animals
such as rat or monkey are similar to
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people
and then, they can advance in the understanding of genetics in
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human
. This leads to investigate treatments for
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disease which relate to genetic traits more
quickly
.
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because
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on
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are
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dangerous
and inhuman. In fact, scientist can not
totally
sure that the result in
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animal
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experiment
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people
due to the difference in cell structure between
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and
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humans
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,
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, it is too cruel to
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use
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animal
as a form of
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new
medicines
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because
it is
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wasteful and
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people
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the safety of drugs. The
first
of these is the effect of
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animal
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testing
on the economy. To illustrate, each year,
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many
countries can cost a hundred million dollars to research
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new
treatments based on
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animal
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experiment
,
however
,
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only
few medicines are
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tested
successfully
. This leads to squander a huge amount of money which can be
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used
for other social purposes
instead
of investigating for
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animal
.
Moreover
, thanks to the effective innovations in science and technology, investigators find
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new
methods to
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test
the level of safety for productions. In fact, nowadays,
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many
countries have
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to conduct
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method which
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uses
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human
cell and tissues to endorse
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new
drugs as an alternative
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test
for
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animal
testing.

In conclusion
, It would be a mistake to carry out
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animal
investigation to find the
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new
medicines and I believe that this issue should
be banned
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IELTS essay 25/09/2017You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer, in your letterExplain your situationDescribe your problemsTell him when you think you can start. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
369 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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