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With all the troubles in the world today money spent on space exploration is a complete waste The money could be better spent on other things To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

With all the troubles in the world today money spent on space exploration is a complete waste The money could be better spent on other things v. 1
The increasing population in every country is putting a strain on transport. While many argue that the government's budget should be spent on increasing the fast railway lines between cities, others think it should be used to enhance existing public transport. I believe building railways is more beneficial. This essay will discuss both sides of this argument. On the one hand, with increasing traffic, improving transport might save someone minutes, but the fast intercities trains will save hours. This is because there are people who travel to big cities from surrounding areas every day. For instance, over ten thousand people go to Gurugram from Delhi daily. As a result, the road becomes over cramped, which increases the travel time from one hour to almost three hours. All this can be solved by laying high-speed railway lines between these cities. Furthermore, if more people use these high-speed lines, the strain on public transport will decrease, which will save people more time. On the other hand, railways will open up new opportunities for individuals. In other words, people can now travel far for better work. For example, the daily wages in Delhi are much more than the NCR area, so the workers travel for hours to earn a few extra rupees. If the commute becomes faster, they can go farther in search of a more paying job. This will make their life easier. They will be able to support their families better with a good income. In addition, employers will have more workforce to choose from. This will benefit small businesses, and therefore the economy will increase. To conclude, installing fast trains between cities will help the government by improving the economy, and the people by getting them new job opportunities.
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transport
. While
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many
argue that the
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government
's budget should
be spent
on increasing the
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fast
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railway
lines between
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cities
, others
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think
it should be
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used
to enhance existing public
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transport
. I believe building
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railways
is more beneficial. This essay will discuss both sides of this argument.

On the one hand, with increasing traffic, improving
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transport
might save someone minutes,
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but
the
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fast
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intercities
trains will save
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hours
. This is
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because
there are
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people
who
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travel
to
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big
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cities
from surrounding areas every day.
For instance
, over ten thousand
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people
go to
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Gurugram
from Delhi daily.
As a result
, the road becomes over cramped, which increases the
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travel
time from one
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hour
to almost three
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hours
. All this can
be solved
by laying high-speed
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railway
lines between these
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cities
.
Furthermore
, if more
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people
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use
these high-speed lines, the strain on public
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transport
will decrease, which will save
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people
more time.

On the other hand
,
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railways
will open up new opportunities for individuals.
In other words
,
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people
can
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now
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travel
far for better work.
For example
, the daily wages in Delhi are much more than the NCR area,
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so
the workers
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travel
for
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hours
to earn a few extra rupees. If the commute becomes faster, they can go farther in search of a more paying job. This will
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make
their life easier. They will be able to support their families better with a
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good
income.
In addition
, employers will have more workforce to choose from. This will benefit
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small
businesses, and
therefore
the economy will increase.

To conclude
, installing
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fast
trains between
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cities
will
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help
the
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government
by improving the economy, and the
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people
by getting them new job opportunities.
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IELTS essay With all the troubles in the world today money spent on space exploration is a complete waste The money could be better spent on other things v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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